All Comments on 'The Red Horse'

I realize this is necessarily a compressed story, given the subject matter, but it needed more development.

If you're going to make this into a muli-part story, I urge you to get with an editor. You need serious guidance on spelling, punctuation, and general composition.

Here's hoping the next story will be a little better.

You need to learn to spell! A simple word like 'by' is not spelt 'buy'. Otherwise for a short story is not bad, but needs some development to be really interesting.

you should learn to spell too...spelt??? it's spelled.........

PRETTY GOOD, I ENJOYED IT. AND FUCK THE SPELLING WHEN I JACKED WHILE READING I DIDNT NOTICE IT