All Comments on 'The RIBRUNT Series Pt. 02: Kelly and Gemma'

Thanks for reading this story.

Parts 1 and 2 of this series were originally conceived as unconnected, independent stories. The fate of our two heroines here was deliberately unanswered, leaving the reader to contemplate the possibilities.

However, I then came up with the idea of linking the two stories and extending it into a series, and my intended way of doing so means that in part 3 we will return to this laboratory. I must admit that a part of me is a little sad that I've had to sacrifice the delicious unsolved mystery to do so, but I hope that once you've read part 3, you'll agree that it's worth the payoff.

As I've mentioned before, while there is a thread that runs through this series, in my mind they are still distinct, standalone stories. If you are expecting everything to build up to a huge climax in the fifth and final instalment, then you'll be disappointed.

I'm not trying to bash your story or anything like that but, I think that there was just too many fetishes being thrown around at any given moment. The couple that I got excited for like the pisshole fucking was EXTREMELY brief and the others that I was only a little into were very long. I think you should try focusing more on one or two fetishes next installment, one thing I know some erotica fans hate is, ADHD narrative. If you do have more fetishes next installment, I hope one of them is dicknipple, seeing you did nipple penetration. Please don't take this a me bashing your story because it wasn't bad or anything like that, it just needs a little more tweaking,

You have a brilliant imagination and good taste, this was an awesome read. You could maybe make it even hotter by describing the girls' feelings in more detail, but really good nonetheless.