All Comments on 'The RIBRUNT Series Pt. 02: Kelly and Gemma'

You have a brilliant imagination and good taste, this was an awesome read. You could maybe make it even hotter by describing the girls' feelings in more detail, but really good nonetheless.

I'm not trying to bash your story or anything like that but, I think that there was just too many fetishes being thrown around at any given moment. The couple that I got excited for like the pisshole fucking was EXTREMELY brief and the others that I was only a little into were very long. I think you should try focusing more on one or two fetishes next installment, one thing I know some erotica fans hate is, ADHD narrative. If you do have more fetishes next installment, I hope one of them is dicknipple, seeing you did nipple penetration. Please don't take this a me bashing your story because it wasn't bad or anything like that, it just needs a little more tweaking,

Thanks for reading this story.

Parts 1 and 2 of this series were originally conceived as unconnected, independent stories. The fate of our two heroines here was deliberately unanswered, leaving the reader to contemplate the possibilities.

However, I then came up with the idea of linking the two stories and extending it into a series, and my intended way of doing so means that in part 3 we will return to this laboratory. I must admit that a part of me is a little sad that I've had to sacrifice the delicious unsolved mystery to do so, but I hope that once you've read part 3, you'll agree that it's worth the payoff.

As I've mentioned before, while there is a thread that runs through this series, in my mind they are still distinct, standalone stories. If you are expecting everything to build up to a huge climax in the fifth and final instalment, then you'll be disappointed.