by Lust4Sex2008
but the misuse of language (to instead of too, obstinacies instead of obscenities, pushing up her shirt instead of her skirt, etc.) was distracting. You need a proofreader who can proofread - not just use a spell checker...
Hi !!!! Think you have built a good start. There are many ideas that both may have in store for their future meetings.
I felt as if I knew them, and wanted to meet her myself. Him? Well he's a nice guy, but no thanks.
A lot of people feels like this please continue the journey.
Lots of doors you've left open. I look forward to seeing which ones you enter and explore. Keep it going. // R1