All Comments on 'The Special Millionaire Chemical Pt. 01'

he is a little fucked up shit.plus how smart can he be if he is still high school at the age most college freshmen with a sister the same age as college sophomores?didnt get passed the 1st crappy page.

I can't believe my eyes have dribbled over this drivel.

While your premise may be good the way you write, or rather lack of writing, ruins any chance it has. Get someone to proof it and help you fix it. Learn how to write conversation properly. Here is an example of other bad composition and incorrect word usage:

"She come out and I did to, we met in the hall and she was flushed red. "

Even rereading your own story may help you see the mistakes. My suggestion, if you are not getting an editor is to read the story concentrating on each word. Read each word out loud and you will then hear how they do not fit together.

Sorry could not make it past page 1.

Seeing as no one else here has the balls to use a handle, I'll take a stab at Editing if you like. You did ask afteral.

2 paragraphs into chapter 2 was enough

You do not know how to write or spell grammar is not a big thing. BULLSHIT!

There are so many errors, spelling and vocabulary, that it became the dominant feature noticed. I THINK there was a pun at least once, but there were so many errors t couldn't tell if it was a pun or simply another error.

That will improve with experience and I wish you luck.

I'm sorry, but I gave up after half a page. Too many spelling errors, wrong punctuations and bad grammar. It's a pity on such a good story line. Please try again.

Since when do they let 12 year-olds submit. Repeat 6th grade and learn English. Geeesh!