by mountian299
Drivel to say the least. You have been told from you start to get a proof reader and failed to do so. Stop wasting our time and your time!
As others have said, you really need someone to proof read you stuff.
Finding an editor is not as easy as you may think but luckily I have got one but will not show up until the later parts of this novel.
Not bad story Plots. Terrible grammar and spell check. Almost makes it necessary to reread every third sentence for understanding of Intent.