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Please continue.

In the third sentence of the first paragraph I heard alarm bells ringing. Sure enough, upon consulting several of my references, I found Poul Anderson's article "Of Thud and Blunder" had hit the nail on the head. Fortunately, that article is now an online resource at http://www.sfwa.org/writing/thud.htm . The salient statement is, "Frequently in Heroic Fantasy, and for that matter historical and Western fiction, the hero cavorts around on a snorting stallion. Now this has been done in reality, but seldom, and that for good reason. A stallion is notoriously hard to control, and, by the way, is not safe to have around a menstruating woman.... A mare, or better, a gelding, is preferable."

Still, you have delivered our viewpoint character to the arms of her captors, and I look forward to seeing what they make of her. A hot, juicing slave girl, by preference.