All Comments on 'The Sultanah Ch. 13'

No one and I mean No one is reading this.

I have been reading your story from the start and enjoyed most of it. This was one of the better chapters and I look forward The next one.

Thank you.

...assholes do nothing but what they're good at, spew shit. Ignore the haters. Personally, I think you should spend a bit more time on proofing, but hey you're the writer.

Having thoroughly enjoyed this chapter, I have come to a conclusion....I am a big boy. I can handle a few editing errors. Truth be told, I was too engrossed in the story to notice any. Excellent!. Please don't let a few small minded morons deter you from more writing.

Thank you

Great Story again!

This story is so good!

I wish Kardes hadn't died. Would have loved to read a threesome of Varis, Nislani and Kardes.

I read that you've written this story in 14 chapters but this world and the characters are too good. Don't end the story. Continue it or write spin-offs or something. You could write about Varis and Nislani raising their heirs while falling in love with each other. Really liked their chapter and the sex.

This story is great. I do not know if you should keep going past chap 14 but I certainly would agree that I hope you do not stop writing stories. You have shown great range from being able to write short hot bits to this epic storyline with a fleshed out world.

Signed

Always looking forward to your updates

Good chapter, I'm sad that you killed Kardes and Arkadas. I would have loved for a big orgy at the end with Nislani, Kardes and Arkadas all getting pregnant by Varis. But seeing as you've already written it I will have to put up with your decision.

Is there a chapter 14 coming because I am really missing this story, and if it's finished let us know. Thanks.

I had to stop reading this chapter at several points and for two different reasons.

First, the logistics of the tragedy are bafflingly poorly laid out. Varis should have been almost certain that an attack was either coming or at least extremely likely. Being that unprepared is realistically very unlikely and infuriating to read. Furthermore, a freaking army marching through the city towards the palace in broad daylight (which would never be so poorly defended even in normal circumstances) would have been intercepted or at least be closely followed by friendly troops. If this story really needed a Game of Thrones style shake-up, there were ways to have it happen logically and reasonably.

Having said that, I also have a strong opposition towards major violence and/or deeply upsetting events in erotic fiction...at least if they are unusual to the story as a whole. Up to this point the titillating scenes have been fantastic, but from this point on I'll just be too upset about the direction things have gone to get anything out of them. Perhaps it is a difficult challenge to be unable to use certain themes and events in a serious story. However, I am convinced that there are few enough people that enjoy the mixing sex and violence that doing so is an error.

THAT BASTARD KILLED KARDES ! So don't get me wrong I did like this chapter but I think because I felt like Varis I wanted her to get her revenge. She went so far with that girl just to prove a point I hope the next chapter doesn't go how I think it will. Varis you better not quit.

As usual very well written and logical. I can't say I enjoyed this chapter because of the completely dispicable element of rape which is heinous in any context but a good story is not all sunshine and daisies. Varis's reactions and emotions were very realistic. Life is very capable of being out the worst in people. Progression of the storyline is sound and keeps the reader on edge. Consistently skillfully written.

Well, bummer about the GOT turn here, but the D/s sex was really intense. Looking forward to how the loose ends of your story get cleaned up.

If Hain and his followers had all brought their armor inside of the city prior to the meeting, the Sultanah's overplaying her hand probably did not make a difference. Hain was going to try to seize power anyway. The Sultanah's reaction - to make Kosla pay with her body - can be understood as brought about by her self-hatred for having been a cause of her sister's and Arkadas' deaths. That Kosla embraces the sex is the surprise. How will it all end? Fortunately, Cin is still around to guide the Sultanah.

Blue eyes

main character continues to be a wretched monster.