All Comments on 'The Sweetest Torture'

A rape by a no good piece of shit

I disagree with the poster below stating that it was rape. It could be the explanation came late in the story and that, along with the ending being abrupt, gave the appearance of rape/non-consent. I think the author may have wanted to put a twist at the end and such. A fairly decent first submission. I'm interested to see what else the author might come up with.

To the second anonymous comment-thanks for the support and the criticism. It was my first story and I can see where I need to improve. The story was very loosely based on an actual incident with a long-time girlfriend. I thought I should darken it up just a tiny bit for the site so that it would not come across too mushy. It is completely fantasy as far as "rape" goes. Many women have fantasies of being forced and this was an admittedly simple story of how that might occur with both parties receiving pleasure...nothing more.

Good first submission, i look forward to reading your next story x

This is cute. Should go on wattpaf