All Comments on 'The Taking'

Wasn't really erotic to me more depressing than anything.

Who wants to hear about weak orgasms and eventual death?

the story. The two parts I liked best were the tension of the taking, and the gentle bonding. You showed the fearful and reluctant acceptance of the male of the power and nurturing of the female.

While I did enjoy the protracted orgasm, I think you nerfed it a bit too much. A protracted orgasm need not be mild, as you portrayed it. That it was longer seemed the place to focus the eroticism. I've seen a ball of mating snakes - it is far from placid. Forgive me for drawing too direct a comparison, I realize the naga are not snakes.

Anyway, thanks for the story. I hope you will revise it someday and spice up the tension in both the taking and the sex. Be well.