All Comments on 'The Taking of Julia'

The husband don't deserve to be with a sexy woman if he never ate her pussy.It was just a shame that the husband was blindfolded, and wasn't forced to watch. He could then see how his wife had many orgasms with the stranger, and how much she enjoyed having her pussy licked. He could then watch his wife take the stranger's semen into her womb, and have her become pregnant.He could see her enjoy having a big cock pushed into her vagina, a vagina which most likely hasn't had any cock in it for over 2 months. The stranger controlled his ejaculation, and fucked for a long time, which allowed her to have many orgasms. You have written a great story, and I enjoyed reading it very much. As you might be able to tell, that I really got into the story. Thanks for the post...Rich

Sometimes a story is sick. Sometimes the comment is.

Rape kits, morning after pills, plus rapeing a woman in front of hubbie while baby is crying is sick not sexy, man will do about 40 years in jail for armed robbery, assult, rape, and the rest of charges, how sexy is that?

The story is well written. The subject however is at best sick. But the worst thing about it is the comment by RICH from ohio. Would he sit there and let HIS wife get raped? Sdaly I think the answer is yes. So what if the husband never gave oral sex, many women don't either. What are you going to do force the women to give blowjobs? I really do question your state of mind. You give every single story that involves rape or non-consent A high mark, why? I know this because of the feeback portal. But as for the writer, I sincerly hope this is just a fantasy. But who knows with the people on this site.

Let me say to start: Your oppinion on the genera or content of the story is irrelvent. If you do not like the subject matter, then do not read about it. The writer has not said they agree or disagree with what is going on, but has presented a narrative that is good and well thought out.

That being said, verbs have power. Write in the present tense, writing in the past takes away from what is happening. Rather then having done something let your stories do something.

Do not let people who do not like the content get you down, I think you have a good story here. Rape will always be a touchy and hard subject, and if a reader does not like it, then they should not read it. But do not let that stop you from writing well thought out stories like this one.

#1 if she just had a baby or even a month she is still bleesing..sexwould cause hemmoraging

#2 how many women are aroused during a rape

#3 story is too short..has been done many times over and better

#4 dont quit the day job

#5 I am the worlds greatest writer..published many times over..literotica writers are so badly educated..unlike moi!!!

#1 if she just had a baby or even a month she is still bleesing..sexwould cause hemmoraging

#2 how many women are aroused during a rape

#3 story is too short..has been done many times over and better

#4 dont quit the day job

#5 I am the worlds greatest writer..published many times over..literotica writers are so badly educated..unlike moi!!!

Dear Writer, I strongly suggest you ignore the suggestion that you should write in the present tense, not the past tense. This is a sure sign of an amateur writer - how many famous novels are written in the present tense, I wonder? Personally I always ignore any stories written in the present, as I know from long experience that I will find them annoying. Stick to your guns, mate: this was not a very good story, but we all had to start somewhere.

I agree with a previous poster who encouraged you to ignore the suggestion of writing in the present tense. Stories tell what has happened in the past and should employ past tense. I usually skip stories written in present tense because their flow and continuity stink.

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I liked your initial offering, and I hope you write more. Nonconsent/Reluctance isn't an easy category, and I thought you handled the storyline well. The morning after pill would end any pregnancy but the wife would still have to deal with the rape and its effects.

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Thank you for sharing your story with us.

Talented? Perhaps - but not intelligent enough to realize that subjects can doom sales to the few sicko's and a few purists who chant talent reigns but don't acknowledge that talent is hollow when the subject is scrambling eggs and rat turds for fun and profit.<P>

Next to the idiots who say turn the page if you don't like it - how short sightedly stupid. Do you really think the scoring is only for 50 and above???<P>

Your comment's purpose is to encourage more egg and turd omelets - for the very few like yourself.<P>

Constructively - The vast majority and Me want to see his talent used to arouse and entertain the 90 plus percentile of readers here and around the world. To let the untalented sick idiots write this craply disrespect of humanity for their few jaded demented brethren to jack off 2.<P>

You - writer - can do much better - for us & yourself.

father of the first child? No I dont find rape erotic? Why is she ashamed she should be furious, mad, and running to release her husband? The only reason she would be ashamed is that she was a party to her own rape.

The anon with the "hardly erotic " heading hit the nail on the head, including his comment about the idiot who said "don't read it if you don't like it". great comment sick story.

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One measure of success of a story is the amount of reaction it gets, and on that basis you have done great! Unfortunately most comments seem to be from people who have difficulty differentiating betweem fantasy and reality, but that is their problem, not yours. Not a bad story, but 3rd person has to be written in the past tense. Thanks for making the effort to write, do more, and let's hope you can wind up the prudes just as well next time!

The method of plot development while alternating between past and present "tense" made it difficult to review. Settle on one format and follow through with it.

Very wicked and dirty which makes it all the better. I thought this was a very yummy fantasy. The fantasy/idea was good, just need to get an editor to fix the mistakes. Overall I liked it!

I'm not sure if I liked it. It's an intriguing concept, deserving of a second read. The amount of time a woman bleeds after childbirth depends on how she gave birth, but cippy2k, ya maroon, 2 months afterwards is enough for most women to be able to have sex again, if they want

Since posting my previous comment ("using the present tense") I've read the story again, and have to say that although the subject matter is pretty distasteful and to my mind not erotic, the actual writing is really rather good - grammar, syntax and spelling are fine, it flows well and gives the reader just enough information without all that unnecessary and unliterary garbage we often see in this genre ("my wife is five seven, 120 pounds, 38D cup" etc.). Keep writing, mate - all you need is a decent idea and you'll have cracked it!

Erotic and intense. I thoroughly enjoyed this story.

If husband paid attention he had a free lesson on how to service his wife and should allow the coming baby benefits if it's a boy. Great story, more please.

Nothing wrong with that, you should just write it openly and stop messing up other categories with this stuff.

Because this is how women act when raped. You need help fucking simp