All Comments on 'The Twins Ch. 04'

In complete difference to the previous chapters I truly don't know where this one is heading for itself and for the story as a whole. Many new characters joined and not all of them are a great addition to the process of relaying this tale, sure dad has some uses and actually brought the family together but David the lunatic is a completely different game. Somehow I wish we get to see less and less of David or that simply disappears and leaves our couple be, his psychotic nature collides with the rest of the story way too much to actually utilize him as any kind of plot driving device aside from making the twins leave the village just to be happy on their own. Guess we'll have to wait and see where you take this one next time.

4* thanks to Vesper otherwise it would be a 3.

I like that you haven't turned this into a big family orgy, like some authors do. Keep it up.

so please let David go and let the twins stay together no matter what...

Would like to see more in this story line