All Comments on 'The Unfolding Ch. 01'

Congratulations. Up with the best erotica I've read.

Well written and erotic. Do we get to see what his new plans are?

well developed, and it draws the reader in nicely.

Deliciously erotic. Keep it coming. ; )

Loved the description of the characters & their feelings.

I can't wait to read more about them.

My only nitpicking comment is about the car. On page 1 it is described as a Mercedes SL550 Roadster. But on page 2 as they are arriving back at the hotel it is described as a Porsche.

Really enjoyed this story.