All Comments on 'The Unfolding Ch. 01'

Really enjoyed this story.

Loved the description of the characters & their feelings.

I can't wait to read more about them.

My only nitpicking comment is about the car. On page 1 it is described as a Mercedes SL550 Roadster. But on page 2 as they are arriving back at the hotel it is described as a Porsche.

Deliciously erotic. Keep it coming. ; )

well developed, and it draws the reader in nicely.

Well written and erotic. Do we get to see what his new plans are?

Congratulations. Up with the best erotica I've read.