All Comments on 'The Visit'

Thank you for your fine story.

Short and to the point.

I loved it!

Please write more.

Rubbish

A brief but fiery story of condensed lust. Please send more!

The background of the story should make it entertaining. This story is rubbish. Don't bother to write if you gonna write more like this. It is a shame that there are not enough good stories from Chennai.

This may be an incident but very badly narrated

Those comments are strangely negative.

It was a nice premise and a pretty good first try (especially as it doesn't sound like English is your first language). Keep reading. Keep writing. Ask people for input. You'll be knocking them out in no time.

pl continue.....

I love the yellow sari and tight braless blouse - you should describe our sexy national dress in more detail. You should also describe how the boy felt when he released your chest. Plus it's nice to have your nipples nibbled but don't ever let anyone 'bite' your clitoris (ouch).

I wish i could have been your groom that day sexy :)

V arousing being licked by a stranger

Hello please go a bit slow and that shall create an amazing lingering tease which shall keep your readers glued to your stories although i loved it and seems is a bit fast paceds just slow it down a bit and see the fun for your self