All Comments on 'The Watcher'

You did a great job with what you wrote, but it needed to be carried thru to a better ending please write more!

the story appearded to be lacking any dialogue or familiararity. It seemed to be a recitation of events without any emotion. I would hope that taking of his daughter"s virginity would have elicited some emotional happenstances. It was a dry reading text. I would only hope that sexual happenings are more exciting to you than what was portrayed. Thank you for the writing (still probably better than I can do).

short and extremely sweet

You have written a nice short scene, but not a story. Without context it has limited emotional or other impact.

Yes it was short, but oh was it ever sweet...

You should be getting higher marks.

Please write more.