All Comments on 'The Wedding Ch. 02'

This was a great lead in to the wedding. He had better take his little blue pills and pace himself if he plans on making it through the wedding. Does he have a shot at the Mother of the Bride? The Bride?

The story line is really good and you write really well but I missed the detail you provided in your first submission. Seems like you were kind of rushing to get this one done and didn't get quite as specific and detailed in your description of scene or the actual dirty deed.