All Comments on 'The Wedding Ch. 03'

I've enjoyed this story until this last page. Referring to his brother as 'retarded'? He wouldn't or shouldn't use that word. Bad form.

BP

Okay, I'll make that shift. I should explain that, when I was young, that was a diagnosis not a put down. It was the name of a specific condition. I know because my brother has that condition or birth defect. So, I don't think of it like people that don't have similar disabilities in their own lives think about it. In other words, for me, it is just a word like crippled or amputee. It is simply a condition. However, I will make the change and resubmit it as a rewrite that they will overwrite. Thanks for your feedback.

The main male character was full of himself, to say the least. He struck me as the type who figured out an attention getting way to walk so he could show off. Probably never passed a mirror without checking himself out. Any more so, and he'd be a perfect example of Backpfeifengesicht

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I should also make it clear that the incest, however brief the mention is inexcusable--not to mention child abuse and a felony offense.