by chkwagon50
Storyline the same. Is it going to end the same way? Bride and groom starting a tradition that never existed.
You're writing a story about an orgy on a porn site yet you're using words you'd find in an article in Good Housekeeping; breasts, penis, slit, etc. A little dirty talk goes a long way! Just saying.
yes there was incest but nothing mentioned about it other than a third person account. why did you not write this from megans point of view or her fathers. nothing the mother did was incest therefore it should have been labeled orgy and not even a gang bang. not knowing the topic is a big mistake in a lot of writers good story line but off topic. learn what incest is, what an orgy is and someone mentioned gang bang but still not clear
story was interesting will give credit for that
You should mixe up the story some. While Megan is on the pill you did not establish how old her mom is or if mom is on the pill. One of the women should have been knocked up from the orgy. Really commit to your whole sperm mixing and have Megan's mom be pregnant with twins or megan's mom and the maid of honor both pregnant. Give us something in the next chapter that completes the fantasy
This is really hot.
I hope Megan’s mom is pregnant from the experience making it a perfect mixing of the families.