All Comments on 'The White Rose'

I think I got a little verklempt towards the end.

Thats something a woman would do, well written story, thanks.

"I am no stranger to giving oral, and like I said I fully expected to have to do this at some point tonight. My only reservation about doing it is that I don't like the taste of cum. Whilst I have swallowed once or twice, I usually know when Mark is going to come and let him finish over my breasts or face. Somehow I knew tonight would be different and I would be expected to swallow it.

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Next time he got close though, I sped-up and he flooded my mouth with his cum. I did my best to swallow it all but some did leak-out and run down his cock.

With my sexual reputation at stake, I licked it all up and resumed blowing him until he softened in my mouth.

"Wow. Mark cheated on that" Tom remarked, by way of a compliment. I must admit that even I was impressed by what I had done and I felt oddly proud of myself."

Very nice. Well written, good dialogue, nicely plotted. It's nice to see the revenge turn into something more, and it's nice to see this from the jilted woman's point of view, which is all too rare in this category.

Only one small criticism. The writer needs to learn to use commas in the dialogue and when to use quotation marks in multi-paragraph dialogue by one character. Thus, the comma goes like this: "I don't know about this," she said; the writer leaves the comma out every time. In Tom's multi-paragraph dialogue in the middle of the story, there should be quotation marks at the beginning, but not the end, of each paragraph--the one exception being they should be at the end of the final paragraph of that character's dialogue.

Otherwise, Bravo!

I am glad things worked out for you. Yes Mark was a fool, I am glad you met Tom and things are still going strong which is another good thing. Well done for this story I liked it a lot it's actually good to read about a cheating husband story and even more so when the wife dumps the cheating husband and moves on and lives well.

Thanks for the story. I hope you write more.

I enjoyed this story knowing it was written by a woman. Mark was indeed a world class fool! That being said: A revenge fuck is never a good solution to fix anyones marriage.

Glad you found a good mate.

Thanks for writing!

revenge fucking is a really bad idea if the intent is to save the marriage. Two wrongs don't make a right!!!

In fact, by revenge-fucking, she (or he, in other stories) almost ensured the demise of the marriage. In this case it was great, though - she found a decent man and they ended up loving each other - GREAT!!!

I just loved the story - thank you.

Taking this as fiction, it's good. As to the revenge fuck, it's nice to have somone thohelp you through a divorce. Probably won't be a long term thing, but nothing to sneeze at. Look forward to more.

Fast moving and written with a lot of vivid erotic sex. A complete story that needs no further chapters, which I thoroughly enjoyed.

Thanks

A Revenge Fuck - Never gets you reconciliation, especially if it's with your husbands worst enemy. The pussy becomes permanently tainted rendering it too contaminated for any further use by the husband. (Non-men and wimps excepted). Which in this case makes it really easy to dump the cheating dog and trade up.

Well written... great job... thank you for sharing it

Its a story and a very good one. Sometimes: I love a happy ending. Thank you.

In Missouri

for a first try, actually it's well done even if it wasn't a first posting. Good character development, good plot line and a smooth read. Technically not too bad, some small hitches, I think Reinquest said it best, that man is one of the better writers on this site so pay attention.

Being a man I've never read many stories on cheating from a woman's point of view, however your story was so well done that I found myself hoping Tom would kick Mark's ass again as he deserved.

I know it's fiction(or is it?) but in real life revenge sex is never a good idea, for either partner. If a man has a one night stand or even an affair of longer than one night, he won't accept the logic of his wife or girlfriend paying him back in kind. A double standard I know but true non the less. (I'm talking reality here not the wimps in a lot of these stories).

A Vulcan would say it is not logical, it's isn't but it's true anyway.

And lastly, if this story has some or all truth to it, good for you. For me a happy ending, either fictional or real, is a good thing.

I enjoyed your story and will look forward to more from you. Thanks for your hard work.

.....to wonder if a woman would actually follow this script, more likely for a man I would think."Revenge fucks" are for kids, I believe.

Well written story and glad she dumped that Mark. Unfortunately there are alot of Marks out there. Thanks for sharing your story.

Fucking his worst enemy is never a foundation for a reconciliation. It is an exit strategy. A woman who tells herself otherwise is rationalizing the fantasy she wants to indulge in.

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Tom was being a dick. He knew the preceding concepts and used her emotions to get revenge of his own. He may well have had feelings for her, but not telling her the likelihood of success was 0% reveals whose interests he valued most.

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Those are things guys know, but not entirely surprising that women don’t. I’m stupefied by the number of women who think it is romantic when a guy says, “If someone as beautiful / wonderful / special / whatever as you was my wife, I’d never (fill in the situation).” Translated into English that means, “I’ll say anything to convince you to fuck me.” It may not be the only goal, but it’s the top priority. The key to recognizing it is the juxtaposition of I’d and never (or always). “It’s a terrible thing to do to someone,” is sincere. Phrase it with the two magic words and it’s manipulative.

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Otherwise, well done.

The story is all standard, but the last bit did make it sound completely real.

Well, Not bad is all i can say.

Well done. But,,,,,,, doing someone for revenge is a way to cut the path to the future with your previous SO.

9" cocks don't exist. Agree to do anything would never happen.

You comment on everything saying "never happens" or "doesn't exist" and you speak with the authority of someone who has never written a story and from what it seems of your worldly experience, has never been out his families basement.

9" cocks do exist, my husband and master has one just over that.

Excellent story and entirely normal from a woman's perspective. Enjoyed it :)

I would have preferred a little revenge on Mark but that's just me.

I know for a fact one of the commentors said revenge of any kind is stupid. But a last a husband cheating on his wife, and you feel revenge is needed. She should've just divorced his ass. Turning yourself in to a cheating slut like he is was a waste. Tom will find out in time, if she cheated on him, she'll cheat on you.

revenge should never be the answer. loved the way you had this one turn out. THANK YOU. PLEASE WRITE SOME MORE!!

But in real life, revenge fucks don't work. Also, they certainly do not lead to a lifetime commitment. Happily on Mars anything is possible.

HA

Definitely worth a 5

... a whore is still a whore if called my any other name.

So everyone was happy. Mark wouldn't have been fooling around if she was worth much as a wife. She found a guy that had low standards. Badly done. Mark was the one that won. By the way, he had hidden over half of their assets so she got screwed in the divorce too.

Tom is worse than Mark! Tom continues to keep his stable of sex slaves.

Entertaining; what's not to like. 5* from me.

She is nothing but a cheating slut.

Totally unrealistic story. Nobody plans a life like this on a lark.