All Comments on 'The White Wolf 03'

This is a slower part of your story and it tells your story better. It brings the reader along for the ride. The earlier stories did feel to me, my opinion, a little rushed. (but you know what they say about opinions, opinions are like arseholes, everyone has one). If you write your story like you did with this chapter then you will get more of your point out to the readers. Not every chapter in a story has to have sex in it. You can build your story and then have the sex become a part of your writings. As an overall to this story as a whole, I give you a solid four star.