by SPEN STERLING
I understand your attempt to make this a tricky little role-playing hubby/wife game, but when you tell us what he's thinking, you can't cheat the reader. Acting like he's wondering what's going on, and the crap about thinking the husband might come home is writing shenanigans. Leave that out next time.
That went from a yawn another cuck story been there done that to a truly unique, amusing and a well written story. I never saw it coming and that gives testimony to your writing skills. Thank you for the posting and giving me a hell of a laugh. 5*
keep the build up slow and we'll love the cum we give from reading it Fuck annony in the heart! 5
After all, nothing wrong with a husband and wife doing a little role play.
This is a good story that shows that "No need to cheat if you have love, respect and above all imagination!!!" 4*...
to properly use your caulk gun.
Otherwise, you just make one hell of a mess!
This WAS the best post in this category today, so thanks!
See FANTASIES are best when they simply STAY fantasies!
Too bad the Anons don't identify themselves by #. (ANONYMOUS #44) It would help others to judge just how good their comments are. They did have a point about the trick writing. To the best of my knowledge, the 1st person character can't lie. That's one advantage of 3rd person.
I enjoyed the story so much I didn't pick up on it, so I gave you a 5.
for the hotwife slutting around but then realized it was just another boring husband-wife role play fantasy. So I gave it one.
This ain't a cuckold story. It ain't a cheating wife story. It really belongs in this category because it seems she loves to role play. It was a surprise at the end.
Excellent job and alway enjoy a story where the husband and wife can truly enjoy each other. They can have fun doing different things together without one lying and cheating. Looking forward to more of this type of story from you
...and ended up AWSOME!
I liked that the two were engaged in a fantasy of the kind that keeps couples strong.
I liked the twist at the end.....that made the whole story.
Don't get me wrong, it was a hot and sexy and a very well written seduction.
The punchline was butter icing. Yum, yum, gimme some!
The girl I should have married did something like this to me. A few weeks later, I ran.
Perhaps I'll tell both stories one day. Until then, thank you for yours. I hope something. Like that happens in your real life.
I find it hilarious that if you write a story in the Loving Wives section, you get panned by readers who get mad if the wife isn't a slutty hot wife, or you get panned if the wife IS a slutty hot wife. This story has neither, but I still got panned by both sides!
This is sexy any way you look at it. Give Dan some chest hair which she can see as he strips off the t-shirt. And having him lie on his back under the sink while she straddles one leg is very sexy. She can probably watch his crotch bulge grow by the minute!
Very sexy interlude and excellent fun for a totally indulgent horny couple.
Never heard 'Wall Street Journal' as a surprise ending. I really thought they were about to be caught in the act.
Well done!
I just wrote a Handyman role play a couple of weeks ago. I like yours better, need to keep the reveal for late in the game. Well done!
This was fantastic. No betrayal, just a couple in love, who love to play with each other. Lovely.
Oh, and the idjits with zero reading comprehension... seriously people? Why are you even on a site that hosts *reading material* if you can't read? A hot story, should have a higher score but people are...special.