All Comments on 'The Year of the Dragon'

A fun first effort, but you gotta proof read, it stops a reader cold to find that wrong word in a sentence - breaks the spell entirely. Just proof read or ask someone else to do read it before submission. It is "here" not "hear":

"Do it and you can go places hear, Mr. Tom" Ms. Donald said temptingly.

It is "scent" not "sent".

Plus may better names? Mr. Tom. Yuck.