All Comments on 'Theresa's Arrangment Ch. 01'

I believe you have great potential as a writer. You have qualities that will capture your reader and draw them into the story, but not with this one. Personally, i see too many adjectives. If i were to change anything, i would change the story to start with, "It began almost four weeks before when Theresa went before her financial aid officer at college." then lead into your story with Mistress Shelley. that way it becomes like a classic story; who is who and what happens type of story, its a more exciting format. other than that, good job, keep working at it. i like your imagination and wanting to express your thoughts in a lively dialogue.

Damn...yes...please write more!