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by mountian299

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
this belongs in the non-consent catagory

your story has potential, but your writing needs work, I would seriously suggest getting an editor.

kelprimekelprimealmost 8 years ago
Normally...

I would not talk about grammar as I purposely misuse grammar for a personalized effect. However... I couldn't get through the prefix due to the really terrible grammar. You are missing entire words!

Re-read your shit before posting it. Your fingers are not in sync with your brain.

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First time writing one of these. Enjoy writing stories which always turn out as novels. Long winded I guess. I am retired from transportation industry. My early works are filled with errors miss spelling and poor paragraph formation. I tend to concentrate on the story more tha...