by Subsun
Well written, too.
But it ended before anything erotic happened.
Worth writing more.
Please continue writing. You have cast the bait well and I'm definitely inerested but the brevity makes me fear that I shall be reading a lot of too short chapters as things develop.
I am looking forward to seeing more of your writing as this seems to be a good start, my only complaint is the shortness of the work itself.
Please continue to evolve this world and it's denizens.
4/5