All Comments on 'Tom's Wife, Joe's Slut Ch. 03'

What can I say. Your are worse then good old JPB

this is bullshit go ahead and make a fucking unfaithful whore the winner and the poor cheated husband the villan you suck as a writer your ideas are why socioty is the way it is go crawl under some rock and keep fingering your pussy you whore

stop writting that shit ....

tom is the only innocent in the story and the wife

if is my wife i kill her.

a whore writting for someone who likes whores.

self-respect.... no, you dont know the meaning of that word.....

tom will divorce the whore and the whore will fuck every man until

she have AIDS or another illness or find someon with a big dick. thats is the REAL story an story with logic.

you only see the side of the bitch. and you are in the side of the bitch.

and a writer dont do that... follow the logic and mind of the people.

if she is a bitch is ok... she do the things of a bitch.

if he is a loving husband... and discover she is fucking around....

WHAT HE WILL DO? DIVORCE OR KILL HER OR STAY WITH HER TRYING TO FORGET OR ACEPT WHAT SHE IS(maybe).... please dont make your own sad desires in the story.

the characters have to do what they are, not what do yo want to do

if the character is a saint he/she dont kill... if the character is a bitch or

a whore... he/she dont stay in celibacy. the characters have their own

personality and you have to respect that.

rewrite the story with more respect for the characters.

sorry for my bad english. :D

Sorry but this was not chapter 3 this was very poor considering I think you are a very good writer. This was a totally new story that had nothing to do with the original sorry but only 1 star.

What crap, what garbage. Same vein as gutless JPB (JPB, is you are reading this, you are a gutless ass). This tale, like JPB's, relegates the husband to a spineless wimp cuckold. In truth, the slut wife should be infected with aids and with great pain fade away.

Too bad the first three comments didn't realize what they were reading.

Dam good story.

Joe and Tom got the fickle finger of fate shoved up where the sun doesn't shine and Karen, Shelly and Brad come out smelling like the proverbial rose. Joe and his two thug buddies got free room and board for a time, much deserved I might add.

Jesus H Keerist folks pay attention, Mandy's writing a satire here and the irony is none of you figured it out.

You all need to start over and read the three stories again. Then analize the two JPB wrote. I admit to liking some of his stories, but, Tom's Wife, Joe's Slut was basically almost funny garbage. Now look at Mandy's ending, she works it out for you. They are all sex crazy buffoons.

I hate to say it Mandy but not everybody is as cynical as you sometimes are. DAM DAM DAM I'm glad you are just exactly who you are. If I were you, I too would be proud to be a ls l.

Thanx again - and keep it up.

Shouldn't this have been posted in Group?

Not a believable ending to the (also not quite realistic) parts by JPB. From me: a weak "4 stars".

I think you should have left JPB story alone Your effort might be seen as to deminish the JPB story by twisting the characters from their original profiles. No amount of spin would turn her from the slut she is and placing the blame on Tom because he walked away from a cheating skank of a wife was a low blow. The real Wimp Ass was her new Pull Toy. He truly exemplifies a wimp in every male readers mind. It was a noble effort but your preconceived notions of what is and is not a strong male is so far from reality it actually is slightly distasteful. But it was a brave effort to put yourself up against a JPB story and put your writing out there to be compared to one of the best writers in his catagory YOU GOT GAME GAL!! I think I would enjoy putting a few bears back with you. You might have been better to publish ths one in another category such as Fetish or something to avoid some of the ranting here nbut from what i see no one is slaming your writing ability just story plot. Anyways keep writing, like them or not I will keep reading if not for the sake of your writing ability

Your an aussie, i never thought i would say this but please stay there you sick fuck, your story makes about as much sense as the other idiot jpb and your logic is retarded.

This story is so bad it should have never been published. A absolute Zero!

she was a whore from the start.she could have said no.

This story is Hot, and so are YOU! Most of us who read Literotica love to read about fuck sluts, so don't let the vocal minority of naysayers bother you. Keep on writing, and keep on fucking!

I have read most of what JPB has written and I think there are more than a few that could use your finishing touches. I read the other parts of this and think you did justice to his story with a nice addition of a woman's perspective. Well done thank you again.

A few minor errors in English useage, but nothing that really detracts from the story. Actually I liked it and think that two similarly minded people got together and that is a good thing. While their marriage may not be for me, or for most people, whatever works for them is good.

Yes, I know it's fictional, but there are people like this out there. In fact I would be willing to bet that most stories on this site about loving wives have actually happened sometime, somewhere, no matter how far fetched we think they might be.

"So what you're saying is, I don't have to worry about what I did, but more so when I did it?

Does anyone REALLY believe this shit?

This was OK and thank you. But this was not your best because your leading lady was just not believable enough. But do keep trying if only because so many of JPB's stories need endings.

but your still so full shit that you really can't say your kind of attitude is any better . with that kind of brain you should be castrated as much as most of your characters in this story, so you won't be able to reproduce your genes.

When you admire writers like JPB and Britease this'll be the outcome. Why don't you start writing stories for MattM as well?

Not a continuation, but a story by itself. The wife's attitude is completely opposite from the original. Tom was wrong, she's not a whore, but a slimy slut. At least whores get paid for what they do.

Had to give you a 1 ! This is the first story you have written that I did not like.

Nothing personal Mandy01 but this story stinks. JPB's stunk so bad no one touched it. This 'ending' is just as bad. You should write your own stories and leave shit stories like JPB writes alone. 1 star is the only rating to give.

Given the constraints of JPB's Chapters 1&2 I think this was a good resolution, written well.

Did anyone really think she would revert to monogamy?

She got free of Joe, and his enabling brother Tom.

Joe got what he deserved.

My only problem is with the marriage. Why bother?

There is a financial penalty (taxes- at least USA; I don't know about Australia) and I can't imagine either set of relatives was thrilled.

And for Anonymous- this is fiction. Look it up. Then take a Community College course in the short stories of E. A. Poe or Stephen Crane.

Mandy - thanks for your efforts. However, given a choice, I would prefer you use your time writing your stuff and not finishing JPB's.

Cheers

Pogma, you hit the nail on the head with your comments. Mandy01, I was very impressed with your writing of this story. The story turned out very well. You took a story with no foreseeable solution and put your spin on it. Congratulations.

This was the first story I read from Mandy01. You have a wonderful imagination, keep up the good writing.

You have some talent and have written some good stories, this was not one of them. If you were trying to justify or explain an open marriage you failed miserably. The direction you were headed at the beginning was good, you just did not take it far enough

in which Ch3 was just a bad dream, and Tom comes home and cleans house the way he really should have in this attempt

Mandy,

Liked it. That the nasties attacked you is evidence that you're good. They wouldn't bother if your writing wasn't. That one of them mentioned me along with JPB, Briteas,e and you I see as a complement. Resolver made a good point about them.

Matt

trying to add a chapter to a typical JPB story is not a good idea.

She should have know how Tom had been treated by Joe and not left him with nothing. What a bitch she is, she deserved Joe. I'm not saying that she should have stayed with Tom, but to treat him like she did shows she did not have any love for Tom at all. They were both hurt by Joe but only the bitch came out of it with anything at all.

I knew I’d have readers out for blood on this one, hence my comment at the end of the story. While I understand why my latest hasn’t hit the top ten, and dare say this one won’t get past the halfway mark. I’m slightly disappointed with the naysayers for not reading the first two chapters properly. As Pogma and Revolver mentioned, I took an existing story without judging anyone’s lifestyle choices and using the premise of continuation of storyline and brought the it to a conclusion. My own values have nothing to do with those of the characters apart from honesty and mutual respect.

Harry! Thank you for not changing. Yes Harry, that is exactly what I’m saying sweetie. Walking across a busy street isn’t a problem normally. Being inebriated and crossing the street might get a Mach truck or Grey Hound Bus parked on your arse, that my dear friend, is a huge problem.

When I read JPB’s first two stories I sat back and actually thought... (Something, it is obvious that most of the naysayers have not done)...of the consequences of what he proposed and ONE LOGICAL...(not to say there aren’t others)...conclusion using his formula. I don’t advocate open marriages or swinging myself, however it’s ridiculous to assume that they aren’t valid or don’t work for those who do want such a lifestyle.

To me respect and honesty is the mainstay of my world. Joe had no respect for either Tom or Karen, or anyone for that matter and deserved none in return. It was a ridiculous situation to start with. I doubt that any wife would put up with a brother-in-law such as Joe; I doubt that any other family members would allow him to continue it without severe censure or with a husband who would allow it without stepping in and doing something about it. I know some wives would have put Tom on dry bread and water, no nookie for him until he got off his wimpy fat arse and stood up to his brother.

When I write a conclusion, that is, what it is. I don’t change the original story content to suit my version, which IS writing a completely new story. All I do is use the ingredients available and finish baking the cake, some may like that cake some won’t, I have no control over other people’s tastes.

Let’s look at what should have happened if JPB had left the story before the confrontation in the study and Karen wasn’t so sexually receptive to her hormones and her ploy had worked the way she originally meant it. Take into account she has been fighting off Joe’s advances for 8years, and you can see she’s certainly pissed at the position she’s been put in by both brothers as they play stupid family mind games with each other.

Karen goes into the study with Joe and Joe thinks he’s finally stolen her off Tom. She laughs at his feeble neanderthal attempts at seduction. He gets angry and attempts to rape her into submission. Tom does man up and comes in and beat the piss and pick handles out of his brother for disrespecting him and his wife. Karen then goes to Tom and lovingly kisses him, thanking him for finally putting a stop to the unacceptable situation Joe has made.

Joe’s embarrassed and slinks off as the cretin he is. Karen and Tom go on to a future that is more loving. I like loving outcomes. JPB made Karen into a slut in the second chapter, that is something you can not change and hold true to the original story. The fact that Karen and Brad are in an alternative lifestyle outcome is about the only one that will fit the criteria, but apart from that it’s beside the point.

Some have said that it was Karen’s fault, I disagree. You can’t blame a car for being stolen if you keep leaving the damn keys in the ignition and walking off leaving it unattended. Karen didn’t make a play for Joe at anytime apart from the last and that was to make a statement that Tom’s behaviour was unacceptable to her. She certainly didn’t go out to look for any extra sex on the side.

I would have preferred to have Tom and Karen work things out, but that’s not how JPB left it, so I couldn’t have this outcome without re-writing his ending, and that as I have said, then become a totally different story.

Joe is ultimately to blame for the set up, he’s an obnoxious arsehole with delusions of grandeur. Tom IS a brow beaten wimp with no backbone when it comes to his brother. He is to blame for allowing Joe’s unacceptable advances and humiliation to continue. Karen didn’t ask for this sexual harassment from Joe and ask repeatedly over the years for Tom to put a stop to it. She is merely an idiot for not walking out on Tom and his fucked up family sooner and is to blame for making a decision at the wrong time when her hormones took over her thinking.

All said and done, I’d like thank everyone who commented and gave their points of view...they are all valid...well most of them ...giggles

Amanda

JPB premise was that this wife was trying to figure out how to make her brother in-law stop teasing her and she ended having sex with him. She enjoyed it "so much" she was willing to do it in front of her husband, his family, her friends, and she was also give up her marriage so that she could keep having sex with his brother.

Her character (as designed by JPB) hoped her husband would never find out and she could continue, and when he did tell her he knew he left her because she just couldn't manage to stop having sex with his brother and "ALL" his friends on her own.

"Your" attempt to fix (or maybe just continue his story, I dunno) that story has her placing "ALL" the blame for her actions squarely on the two brothers and it's written so that she then comes out of everything "SHE'S" done smelling like a rose at the end.

See that doesn't really work because the husband should take most of the blame when she's raped because she was put in an awkward position. But now when she's the one who put herself there, and later it blew up in her face she decided to keep doing it because she enjoyed it and hoped she'd never get caught (per JPB's story). So having her come out at the end of the on top and her getting a happy ever after ending at the expense of her husband and Joe, after "she" was the one who couldn't resist standing at her own door naked and in heels waiting for Joe's call so she could see him and be his personal gangbang slut, "really" doesn't make sense to me.

Your story turned one of the main protagonist causing the most amount of pain to another into the victim, while at the same time you then tried to make it one of the victims faults that she did what she did, and continued to do it until caught.

On second thought you "did" do that to be honest, and to me that just made JPB's bad story even worse.

The last patch job you did on JPB's story I kinda liked, but this one not so much. Sorry.

The wife was never a victim in JPB's story, except in her mind, your story just strengthened her characters selfish position of willingly cheating by making that mistaken belief "she" was the victim true, and thus made his story it even worse for me.

-Risq

Sorry, just don't get into Cuckold wimp husband stories. JBP says he writes to entertain himself and I think he gets his jollies off when he pisses off his readers. Too bad you brought an extra male into the story when there were enough involved already. Please do us a favor and just piss us off on your own merit.

Ok, I read this, read some comments, then went back and re-read JPB's first chapter. Now, if you cut the story off at the point when she just enters the room with Joe, then yes, your story could make sense as a conclusion and not a whole new story. But JPB's chapter didn't end there. She became a slut, not because of her husband, but on her own. And that is clear to anyone who reads the entire chapter.

My real problem with your version of events is the fact that you claim she only made one mistake. And that was confronting Joe when she was in heat. In reality, she made a series of mistakes that night. The first was what she said before she went off with Joe. If that had been my wife, I wouldn't have followed her either after she said that. I would have gone home after she left the room, changed the locks and then divorced her. Her second mistake was not leaving the room after she went in. She just had to get her hands on Joe's cock first, probably so she could tell her husband that she'd held it in her hands and make him feel worse about the whole situation. Her last mistake that I feel like commenting on was her willingness to suck his cock after he placed it in her mouth. Let's just say that unless he was holding a gun or physically threatening her, she could have easily just bitten his cock at anytime to get away.

To summarize all this, once she had an excuse to act like a slut, she took it. That was how JPB's story went. Your story wasn't a chapter 3, more like a sequel to a story that only you had read. Yours COULD have been a chapter 2 however, I will give you that. But the REAL chapter 2 kinda kills the whole premise of your chapter 3 and how most of her problems were caused by other people.

First jpb is an ass in need of therapy. His stories are full of wimps and bullshit. So be didn't leave much to work with.

Second, Karen is a selfish piece of shit as is Joe. Tom wasn't a wimp, he just didn't bother to deal with his worthless wife. Frankly if her and Joe died a horrible death the story would have been a lot better,.

As for you tale. It failed. You didnt really deal with the original, you moved them out and brought in another asshole brad. Karen is still a worthless whore and Joe is still someone who would improve the hunan race by dying.

Garbage in garbage out.

I can't say much that hasn't been said. You tried to end a JPB story which really can't be done as he leaves us nothing with which to work. You tried to salvage the un-salvageable and used some pretty self-serving and convoluted logic to do it.

I like most of your stuff even when I may not agree but this is one you should have left alone. I look forward to your next ORIGINAL piece of work!

A little on the wild side but still a good read.

Just a little left of kinky.

Thanks for the read

If I time this right ... this comment will exist for about twelve hours before it's deleted ... nonetheless:

Literotica provides a forum allowing for comments on a story with few restrictions. I dare say some of you have taken this to an extreme beyond any shred of decency.

Commenting on the plot, characters or other elements of a story are certainly within intended parameters. However degrading and demeaning personal attacks are nothing short of infantile. Actually I've reconsidered, an infant wouldn't make these type of attacks ... this is more akin to middle school/junior high.

Your cloak of anonymity gives you the capability to say almost anything you wish. That capability doesn't make it proper.

I have to believe you weren't raised the way you express yourself ... so what went wrong?

HarryinVA ought to learn some fucking manners. All the same i didn't enjoy the story, and the protagonist came across as vile-mouthed.

Blaming her husband for not standing up to Joe was lame. You blamed him for the choices SHE made. She could have called the police, she could have said no...she didn't. IF that was the life she wanted to live, then own up to it, divorce her husband but here are are reasons why whores don't have happy endings. STD's, unwanted pregnancies, drug addictions, beatings...even murder are some of things they face and you're blaming her husband for her choices?

A very piss poor story.

that all the things that happened is just full of justifications for the wife, and she is left with the better outcome of all.

ITs funny, because although Joe was left with just a nut he at least was left with his house and some sort of relationship with his wife, but Tom, the offended person, was left with nothing!!!!!!!!!

Writing needs some editing. To and too are used interchangeably, and incorrectly, I might add. "Too" means "also" and is an adverb, while "to" is a preposition. Another example that actually made me chuckle: "Now he exuded an air of confidentiality." I think the author meant to say: "Now he exuded an air of confidence." Confidentiality means keeping something secret -- the context of the sentence concerned the man's confidence, not his desire for clandestine activity.

As far as the story goes, I have to agree with others that this author's original writings are better that this attempt to add to JPB's story. Firstly, I don't think the style of writing was even close, and secondly, Karen did not remain true to her character as developed in JPB's two chapters. She was disappointed with husband Tom (in JPB's story) but still loved him. In this story, it seems to me she is quick to hate him, as if he stepped out and betrayed her. In fact, he left because he felt she no longer loved him.

In this "part 3," it is all about her. Karen blames everything on her ex and his brother Joe, and feels she is 10% at fault, at the most. It was too predictable (and unoriginal) that she would shoot Joe in the groin -- Lorena Bobbitt could learn a thing or two from Karen (or maybe this author?) about emasculating a spouse. Thanks for writing.

Winterfox is correct leave this lady writer alone all stories are open for ridicule BUT the authors are NOT! NOTE TO FELLOW READERS: We non-writers are given the Privilege of reading these stories by the authors. To attack them Personally in any way is a disservice to us all and will only result in us pushing authors away from our category. I would suggest that the readers should read an authors entire library before ranting against an author for a single story. Even then the comments should be tasteful and measured. Mandy is an excellent writter and although I gave this story one star I still love reading her stories

If I do not like a story, I just do not comment. If all you can do is attack the author it would be better to keep your comments to yourself. If you feel the need to attack at least have the balls to sign it. As if you will even care what I have said.

As for the story, Not my cup of tea. But, I can see how some people might like it. I prefer the stories where cheating does not occur (even if someone is tempted) and the subjects continue to live happily. Thank you to the author for your work.

To the chickens who trash others stories without identifying themselves, "I can locate a nice large pile of rocks for you to hide under. And fuck with the snake that is there with you."

Do not go away mad, just go away.

Sorry Mandy, but your explanation just doesn't work. The justification for Karen cheating doesn't work.

You made Karen blame it on her hormones and Tom's wimpiness. If her hormones made her utterly crazy and not accountable for her own actions, then wouldn't all teenage rapists get off scotfree? Loads of raging hormones there, they couldn't help raping that girl!

Tom was a wuss for not standing up for himself, and stop Joe from harassing Karen, right? You actually equate it to leaving a car unlocked with the key in the ignition?!

Is Karen a car? Is Karen Tom's property? Mindless with utterly no will of her own? Is it like two dogs fighting over a bone? That's REALLY sexist.

So if a woman leaves her husband in the company of one of her hot girlfriends, and they have sex, it's the wife's fault. "Sorry baby, I was horny, and it's all your fault for leaving me with her!"

The perpetrator playing the victim doesn't sit well with anyone. This is just a really bad story, and the excuses don't work.

Well this has certainly opened my eyes to how some men think, don’t know if I like what I’m reading but I can’t refute it.

Marriage Crash Investigation as in Air Crash Investigations is a multiple cause and effect scenario. Plane’s as marriages don’t crash for just one reason. It seems to me that you’re all saying that Karen is solely responsible for the destruction of her marriage. I disagree with you all, I believe everyone is responsible to one degree or another as I stated in my conclusion.

The crash happened in chapter two written by JPB, the rest is counting the dead and picking up the pieces, all I have done is look at the evidence Bob left for us and brought it to a LOGICAL if a little kinky conclusion.

Any one of the causes could be removed and the crash averted. When air crash investigators go in they examine the evidence and see where the blame for the crash lays. Proportioning blame as to how much can be placed on any one particular event.

FACT...Joe started the ball rolling with his 8 year constant harassment of Karen. No one stopped this totally unacceptable behaviour. Not Tom, not his family or friends. I can’t believe no one sees this as the ultimate crime? If someone had stopped him, then the marriage would have been saved.

FACT...Tom turned his back on Karen and her problem and refuses to help her. What loyalty is he due from her after he basically threw her to the wolves and let his brother do that? If he had done his duty to his wife and stood by her like a loving husband does instead of slinking off every time Joe made one of his outrageously unacceptable remarks then the marriage would have been saved.

FACT...Karen had what I would consider a mental seizure of reasoning due to the constant bombardment of her sensibilities by Joe. If she hadn’t gone and done what she did, then it would have made little difference. I believe the marriage was nose diving anyway, all she did was hit the wrong peddle in the cabin and send the marriage into a death spiral quicker. Her motive at the time wasn't to fuck Joe or have an adultrous relationship outside her marriage. She wasn’t the one who could have fixed the problem unless she got very lucky, as we know she did the wrong thing at the wrong time.

I let my father read the story by JPB without giving him any indication of what I had done. Once he read it I asked him who was at fault. He said that Joe needs to be strung up by his family jewels in the town square and flogged to within an inch of his life. Tom needs horse whipping and doesn't know how to treat a wife and should be sent packing for his lack of consideration and total disrespect for Karen. Karen needs therapy to get past this horrendous act.

So you see, I now don’t care what any of you think. I have the ultimate approval from the people I consider a REAL men. Ohhh and BTW, Otto said the same thing.

I hope the next story I submit has a better reception, but I won’t hold my breath.

Regards

Amanda

...but totally useless. some men are just too scared to read what is written. let's say they read with their knee. it reacts when a hammer pats on it. but if you prefer to compare it to pavlov's dog, be my guest (smile).

(this doesn't distract from my opinion that you should have left jpb's story alone.)

My dad's a real man, so are my uncles, and they said Karen is not blameless because of that harebrained scheme of hers, which she failed by being actually seduced by Joe. So I don't care what you think! LOL...

I have no idea who Otto is though. Doc Ock?

FACT. Joe had what you would call a prolonged mental seizure of reasoning due to high hormone levels. He's a victim of his hormones. That's it, yeah...

FACT. Karen thought up the plan to humiliate Joe, and failed in it, which precipitated the actual cheating. Main cause for marriage crash found.

I can't stay serious, not with such comments. Heh.

Whats all the fuss? This could have all been prevented if Tom would have protected and respected his wife. Someone said Tom was the only innocent one, your fucking kidding me right? I liked the line about him not watching her back. Thats one of the main things it is all about. Tom's inaction spurred the wife to see if he could find his balls, it turned out badly. Thats because once again Tom could not find his balls or a crowbar or a piece of pipe. For eight years he had the chance to do something and he did nothing. Lay off my wife or I'll fucking kill you would have worked nicely. Everything that happened in this chapter is a result of his inaction. Swinging isn't my thing but it seemed to fit here. At least there is no lying or cheating. Maybe Tommy should have told his mommy to make his brother stop. Again whats all the fuss? Tommy was a weak little bastard who failed his wife. Every time that he didn't do anything she lost more respect for him. It's sad that the number of sensitive wimps seems to be increasing.

We should feel sorry for the broad because of what this fucked up family has done to her. Most would say they ruined her life.

Calm down, it's not even your story. You tried to make a purse out of a sows ear, and failed. Big deal. Mandy01, you are big brave girl for writing such a story. You will write another blinder of a story next time around and every one that doubted you will humbly apologise. DO NOT STOP WRITING. You are one of the best writers on this site. And IMHO you are better than cleaning up JPB stories. So please let the next story come from you not him or anyone else for that matter.

This was supposed to be a turn on? Yikes!

Turned a really bad story into something even worse yet!!!!

At first I thought Brad came off as a pretty educated guy the way he explained behavior. Even his explanation of Tom's behavior citing his childhood and history of Joe dominating him and his family allowing it impressed me and we all know you can't escape your upbringing. It was only talk that Karen had to put up with until she grabbed Joe's cock. From Tom's point of view Karen was willingly fulling Joe into his den and then closing the door. With his insecurity and pattern of being dominated by Joe it is no wonder that he just walked away. Brad with his apparent knowledge of behavior should have known that Tom's upbringing left him no choice but to walk away after he watched Karen pull Joe into his den. Sure insecurity is learned but the body supports it chemically and really never goes away. But Brad and Karen were just as cruel towards Tom as Joe was and Joe was raised that way so using your logic why Karen shouldn't be held accountable because of her hormones also applies to Tom. People that are insecure develop different coping mechanisms. Some get mad and lash out to feel more secure in those situations and others just walk away. The way Karen justified her behavior and then ridiculed Tom's behavior was just using anger to make it easier to cope with her sadness and anxiety. Tom wasn't a wimp he was betrayed and hurt believing that this is what Karen really wanted. So actually what else could Tom really do? He reacted the only way he could. Then when the shining knight (Brad) turned into the black night as he rubbed his affair with Karen in Tom's face and then threatened him with bodily harm to humiliate him seemed like a complete character reversal. You were trying so hard to make this story into a justification for polygamous relationships you turned your main characters into selfish villians that are using sex to fill the holes of insecurity in their characters. However, the writing wasn't bad

You are a talented writer. It's time for you to stop 'fixing' other stories and just write your own. You're smart enough, you're good enough, and darn it, people like you.

WE CANT ALL LIKE BASEBALL, APPLE PIE OR STORY ENDINGS. WRITINGS BY MANDY ARE USUALLY GOOD, THIS TRILOGY ENDING IS NO DIFFERENT. SHE SHOULD CONTINUE USING HER OWN SPIN ON PLOTS AND CHARACTERS. TK U MLJ LV NV

Karen started out to blame as much as Joe and you justified her actions.

Boo to the queen of slime and filth.

Brad starts as a nice guy then take Joe's place.

Please let the bad story plots to just bob.

thanks

And in spite of some nonsense, this chapter does have some value. I gave it a 3.

Normally this is a very good writer but perhaps he had a very bad day or too much to drink because this story is way below his normal standards.

sad and pathetic. product of a pussy sozzled brain. the philosophy lesson from Brad was hilarious. the social anthropology of female sexual behaviour - priceless!!!

a gay, female, Australian - you are excused and absolved of the sins of pathetic production. believe me, we understand.

Unexpected, utter rubbish from a good author.

THE AUTHOR HAS PUT A DIFFERENT PERSPECTIVE ONTO ANOTHER AUTHORS STORY. WHILE MOST STORIES ALLOW FOR DIFFERENT ENDINGS, THE ONES THAT DO NEVER HAVE A CLOSURE AND ALLOW READERS TO GUESS FOR THEMSELVES. THE AUTHOR IS TALENTED AND ALWAYS PUTS OUT GOOD SUBMISSIONS. HOWEVER SHE HASNT POSTED SINCE VALENTINES DAY "11". I HAVE BEEN WAITING FOR A NEW STORY. TK U MLJ LV NV

That Women are simply life support systems for their Cunts with no other redeeming qualities whatsoever, and this example was written by a female writer. As always loved the writing "style" and Mandy's pace to the story. But honestly the self admitted Slut and Whore calling her husband a wimp for dumping the scat eater and taking off? I guess he should have taken the other option ..... Putting a couple grams between her eyes! I think we would all have preferred the second option? But that would make Mandys story very brief!! LOL.. And although a very slanted story Mamdy is still one of the better writers on the site

Is she only ten percent to blame for what happened because all she had to do was lay on her back and spread her legs? This was a really stupid story and quite frankly Tom would have killed the slut.

it until you ended it the way you did. Too bad. Seems there was no saving of her life, at all.

Life support systems for their Cunts with no other redesign qualities whatsoever

I think that all the peoPle is this story are candidates for the darwin awards. Absolute trailer trash.

Well, that didn't turn out the way I expected.

Take your feminist attitude and shove it up your ass bitch! But I'd suggest taking your head out first! If you can find it so far up there!?!?

Not a real tolerant bunch I see - but no surprises either -

"The only good story is one I like the ending of" - seems to be the mantra lol

Too bad they night find something wort thinking about otherwise - not necessarily support or participate in but accept for others - my issues come from very different areas - I see Bard as the prowling predator not the pack Alpha - if he hits a true pack Alpha it would be a different discussion - the pack leader sees the advantage to staying home and supporting the growth of the group (civilization) the prowler still looks just for the straggler - the weak and vulnerable. But just my opinion.

Our lady lead however is a woman who feeds her baser instincts and interests again a loner type activity the pack (not herd by the way) likes fidelity to it. But there is certainly room for both if there is as mentioned honesty - no complaint here -

While there is still some cut and paste or find and replace type fixing for the editor - still the basic story is well done and well designed - thank you -

who is expected by our society virile and courageous.

I am a man who was blessed with an abundance of size and strength, and endowed enough to make most women happy sexually. I have many male friends who have been crushed because society tells them to "be a man". Some dudes just dont have the goods to be confrontational, and it is BS for the woman in their life to expect them to. I am sad to admit I probably would have told Tom to "man up" truth is as written he is the kind of guy who just cant. It is as intrinsic as the color of his eyes. And yes it was cowardly for him to leave, and immature. But it was cold and calculated and horibbly mean what she did.

in sight. Can't find a thing to like about any of the characters.

Enough said

or turns your crank, or bounces your ball, or rolls your egg,....etc.

You created a fucking dirty ass piece of shit cunt. * because there is nothing lower.

First the good comment - I liked that you tried to finish one of JPB's many, many unfinished stories. God knows a writer could make a career of finishing Bob's unfinished stuff. But this story was such a mess! You finished turning her into a whore.

You finished turning Tom into a spineless wimp. And you got revenge on Joe and his friends. (Btw - no law system gives the wife ANY control or duties on a parolee.) But I have questions. Do you really think a waitress would make enough money to catch up and make the mortgage payments on the house, let alone the upkeep? Just turning off the lights didn't get it. Did her salary pay for her education? Did she have lots of spare cash lying around to pay for the attorney and court costs? Did the Court not make the usual demands of Proof that she had tried to contact Tom? Nothing to his family, friends or work? And Tom disappeared for a year, doing no work and not contacting anyone? How did he live? And you actually manage to turn Brad from a White Knight into a spineless cuckold that behaves like Joe did - using a number of women as play toys. What else can you call a man that allows his Bride to have sex with a lot of men - on their wedding night/day? Yep - you had a possibly good ending here and you took it and fucked it up! Try again. Bob and others have lots of unfinished stories!

What is the point of them getting married? They could be friends with benefits, they could be roomies, and still fuck all and sundry. I'll go out on a limb here...I'm guessing that when two people want to be married, they do so to the exclusion of others, I think we all know the definition of marraige. As for "paying for a European vacation" with her ass, pussy, and mouth, how does this not make her a whore? You've started with a somewhat normal hetrosexual wife and turned her into a bisexual whore in an open marraige. What's next, does she become the Ambassador of Fucking to Lithuania? Do we develop a warp drive for spacecraft built from her pussy? If you're going to write unbelievable fiction, may as well go for the gold.

Anon asked "What is the point of them getting married?"

My experience with an open relationship is second hand. Talking to people I have known, who were willing to admit to one or both partners swinging. And I asked that question "Why do you bother being married?"

Those who responded, it was always about the money. Just as all wars have an economic basis, all marriages are basically about the family finances. Sometimes marriage is required for both partners to gain an inheritance or bequest. To protect and provide legal protection for their offspring.

If one of the partner's is sick or injured or even dies, the other partner automatically inherits, collects on insurance and other financial benefits. That is especially important when there are children. Just think about the requirements for regular or medical Power of Attorney, in case of emergencies.

This is why the Gay community is demanding the official recognition of same-sex marriage. They are NOT demanding recognition by any religious bureaucracy.. They simply want the same legal protections for the financial security of their families.

This is why it is such hypocrisy by the BTB lynchmob, when they accuse women of being whores, i.e. fucking for money. The husband does NOT own the Family Corporate income and property. Any more then a CEO of a Corporation owns the cash flow and buildings of the business. That all belongs to the family members as a whole and the shareholders as a whole body.

Otherwise the dixiecrats on the Supreme Court, who proclaimed Corporations as legal entities with human rights, are as senile as they act.

The premise of your thread in the discussion board is entirely reasonable.

I write stories and submit them here. Some like them but those that don't just take the opportunity to spew hatred. Actually I think someone has a specific hate on for the anything they don't approve of in the "Loving Wives" category. Most of the negative comments I get have nothing to do with the story or how well it is written.

As near as I can tell many readers are ok with women being used and abused and treated like garbage. What they can't abide is a sexually strong woman who doesn't accept their shame. It touches a visceral insecurity that I never knew ran so deep.

Thank you for taking the time to invest yourself in your stories and share them with us. The effort is appreciated by some of us.

Policywank

with the first two paragraphs. This is a woman who blames every one but herself. Sure 10% is her fault. And she continues blithely to blame others as she continues down the path SHE CHOSE. Tom was a fool to marry her in the first place and this addition only shows a woman so selfish that she cannot take responsibility when she fails others. Bob was right to stop where he did.

shit story. talk about fantasy...you should be writing for the obituary column. that would have more life and plausibility than this and would be more exciting

...if you are able and willing to bring a story to a sensible ending,

It doesn´t matter at all just how interesting or emotionally loaded the first two chapters have been: Your readers will judge you by how the story concluded,

And it seems nobody really enjoyed that last part. 2/3s talent just don´t do it; you need to go all the way..Sorry.

This was a bad ending...why? she no longer was Joe's whore, but became Brad's whore...What kind of ending is this?

on here a long time ago, don't remember the title or the author, but it was about a man who fought very hard for his wife when she started cheating on him. He could never get her attention or her respect no matter what he tried. He kept trying until he started having different dreams where he was fighting to get to her but kept getting killed every time until in one dream he reached her and she turned out to be the mastermind behind all of his failed attempts. When he woke up and started to put all of his dreams together he realized that in trying to fight for his marriage, because of her cheating and her lack of respect for him that it fostered, she was his opponent and because he was fighting her to save the marriage he couldn't win so he cut his losses and left. Moral of any of these tales is that if you have your spouse fighting against you to save the marriage it is already lost. A waste of effort and therefore futile.

Nor was there a single, likeable character in this whole mess. Just plain disgusting. While I don't like it when JPB leaves his stories unfinished this wasn't any good as an ending.

...spent trying to justify her actions in the first part of the story. The truth is there is no one to like in this story. Quit trying to salvage someone else's story, you have the talent to write your own.

This story is equally as awful as the first ones. The fact that it is so long just exacerbates the pain of reading it.

I knw dear annony loves it! So I rad it and voted a 5. Merry Xmas asshol of Lit, dear annony

Dear annony, give it up sweetie I will always counter!! So merry Xmas and die

For vastiesmith2, alias bonnietaylor2

True life serial cheating wife exposed on Facebook profile of dearbornmt@yahoo.com

You write that during ovulation any and all wives will fuck any and all comers. That is a biological fact according to ol brad and he enjoys whoring his wife out.

Hey have at it and good luck. A husband gives his wife jewelry for her birthday, Valentines Day, their anniversary, Mother's Day etc chances are he gets fucked. He does not give gift HE DOES NOT GET FUCKED

Sex in exchange for something of monetary value is definition of whore

You be the judge

Why would you fight for a Cum Catcher

Five plus stars.

Barely better than Bob. Some knight in shining armour! Brad explained that she wasn't a slut but sure as fuck turned her into one.

Your worst yet.

this sucked no likable character at all

Wish you had put that in page 1 so I could stop reading sooner. Promiscuity isn't even normal among animals, except for the one you turned your female character into. What a sad perspective on human nature and sexuality.

You must be starved. And you probably deserve to be.

I can understand why so many dislike this story.

But I liked it. It was fun.

Consenting people can do what they want if it doesn’t hurt other people. Some would say that Joe and Tom were hurt. But didn’t they cause it themselves? Tom by his lack of action, and Joe by his actions.

Anyway I like the way Mandy writes.

5* from the Nordic Viking

Trying to make the husband the villian for not accepting a slut for a wife, FUGDAT.

1 Star

Total load of shite, only a fucked up dyke could write this shit.

...is a hallmark of Just Plain Bob. And Mandy (but I've only read 2 of her stories ). She stepped outside her usual. And turned JPB's unfinished story into a doozy.

A weird, kinky, nontraditional story of 3 slut pals. Fitting for Literotica. Just like the 3 fit each other. Turned JPB's frustrating story into a satisfying resolution.

I'd never live it. But I liked reading it.

5 stars

Paul in Oklahoma

And if its your position that ..."The only reason for us being where we are today is the fact that you were such a spineless wimp that you couldn't stop your brother from taking what was up until then, yours. You deserted me and took off letting that asshole of a brother do whatever took his fancy!... than think about a faithfull wife who remained her legs close or report her brother in law to the police for rape is also a possibility! But only for a normal wife and not for a slut!!