All Comments on 'Tournament Time Ch. 02'

well writhing

but really too short. More chapters needed.

but needed better proofing. I'm surprised the average star rating isn't higher. I assume that was primarily occasioned by the story's brevity.

1*

Still 3 *, but for very little....Before he had performed with the other wife, he should have talked with his wife, and see what she had to say...I'll wait a little more....

Compared to the build-up of the first chapter, this one was way too rushed. You should have drawn out the last three chapters into almost an entire page, but it was like poof, we're naked, bam, we're fucking, with no buildup whatsoever. Take your time...lead the reader on and don't feel you have to have the guy's dick inside her within two sentences...

A good premise, a good basic story. Needs to be longer and/ or chapters closer together. Enjoyable read. Spend more time building up to the sex.

4 stars at least

Shoulda talked with own Sweetie before swapping!

Please don't tell us 'traveling swappers' put the two kids in one room and adult (and adulteress) in other room...or just rented ONE room!

Description of activities.... lacking detail

Chapters ... too short

General story ... good but a 3rd chapter needed and it does require more & better detail

They aren't even... Abby and John are one up on Lynda and Abby's hubby. And Abby was a lying cheater. While she cucked her faithful stupidly trusting hubby. And John's a scum bag too.

cuck shit.