by YKN4949
Hey everyone, I appreciate your comments, even the negative ones. But if you think my story is "a load of crap" let me know why. I can't write better stories unless I know why my current stories are deficient. Thanks - YKN
Hi YKN, I enjoyed your story. It was well written, with the exception of a few typos here and there (but that's okay) and had a nice flow. I'm actually not a real fan of horror/slasher flicks, but found this one to be a good read. I think, for me at least, having so many characters is a little confusing. You do a good job describing them as they're brought along in the story (and I liked how you added in describers to the girls to remind me who was who every once and a while), but I might not have so many characters on at once. Maybe it's just me (I'm not good with people's names) so adding in more descriptive words for the girls could help. Overall, well written and fun read, keep up the good work!
Aside from some editorial mistakes, I think this was a fresh take from the usual stories. I look forward to reading further installments. Maybe a prequel where we get to know the characters background a little bit more.
it was a great story...... it had sex and horror, my 2 favorite things lol. i want to know more, like what happened at the end with Ami after she heard the child giggling or did she really unleash something dangerous???? please continue story. :)
to be honest my feelings are a little confused about this story
i'm not a fan of horror stories, but it had t-girls in it and it was written by you. so i figured i would enjoy it as much as the other ones. the warning at the beginning had me thinking that the deaths wouldn't be so bad or have them happening on key characters.
however - and this is probably just me or my dislike for slashers - i simply can't appreciate the fact that pretty much everyone dies, after having sex. it's hard for me to appreciate the awesome sex scenes, when everyone will die pretty violently in the next few paragraphs.
i'd like to repeat how awesome your Tgirls sex scenes are, wouldn't want you to think you did a bad job, everyone else is very positive about it.
that being said, the only thing you should/could change about this story are the few spelling errors (Gianni fucked Gianni's ass ...).
thank you for reading my (personal) opinion on the story. i'm pretty sure you can contact me on my profile, though keep it civilized.
as always i'm looking forward to more stories.
sorry i kinda spam your comment section, but i forgot to mention something
the revelation at the end of this story was pretty smart/well thought off
just wanted to let that know :P
I love slasher films and you captured the feel really well, loved this fic.