All Comments on 'Transformation Ch. 05'

Evil cliffhanger is evil. Great story so far, I hope it continues. The whole 'alien prison' thing is weird, but I've read weirder. It might be worth getting an editor, because there are quite a few grammatical errors or sentences that don't make sense. Good work. Keep it up.

I'm just going to say WTF! and wait, great job

Great Story . I hate cliff hangers. I love how the story is going and I love the twist. The X-Girlfriend was unexpected but that just made more hungrier for the next chapter.

Thanks for the comments.

I knew when I wrote the final paragraph it was the most likely to draw a reaction and unfortunately I do love cliffhangers. I always want to be there when someone reads it for the first time just to get the look on their face.

I am also planning to look into an editor as you deserve the best written story I can provide.

i know this is not the last chapter heather has a big surprise coming

Heather needs to be changed as a lesson, please wright it I know you can

Paul.................

Definitely enjoying the story, much awesome. Can't wait for the continuation.

Seriously chromex - you HAVE to keep writing this series !!! Everyone who had read the series so far have enjoyed it immensely - you cannot just leave us hanging like this !! Love it and want more !!

. Now I gotta go get me a Big Juan at the Chuck-box.

I do fully intend to continue the story. Chapter 6 is written and chapter 7 is in progress. I am waiting to hear back from the editor I messaged as I would like to clean up the grammar and structure. I do greatly appreciate the positive feedback I have received and it certainly encourages my to continue.

Thanks for breath of fresh air!!!. And thanks for sharing.

You have a great vivid imagination and I've just cum after that fuck fest and then you leave another spoiler for Chapter 6 compelling reading

So far I have been reading this story without actually skipping a line as I usually do. Having lived in the Phoenix area some of the places bring back memories.What is scaring me I know someone named Heather that could probably pass for the ex. I have come across a couple of places where it seemed a word was missing or something similar. But overall this is one of the better stories I have read. I especially like the cliffhangers at the end. Reminds me of the last show of the season of a show where they want you to come back.