by Recidiva
Reci..you make me happy. Funnily enough I wasn't expecting such meaness from you. Color me amazed and horny. How am I supposed to get back to work now?
LOL, I usually do NOT enjoy the non-consent category. They're just too boring and cliche...but your story was an unusual, refreshing, twisted little tale that I liked.
You've got some delightful prose and imagery, the sex is uncomfortably visceral, and the turnabout is an unexpected shot of fun just when it seems the ride is over.
I liked it - particularly thought the first part was very well written, but the second was too quick and hurried. The tense changes made me stop and cringe (sorry!). All in all a good effort, but I think you should have waited on this a bit more before submitting.
Great writing and superb storyline. I like the way your mind works.
A story any pimp and his tart could relive a thousand times and probably with more panache. Even the writing is mediocre!
The tense changes from past to present in a couple of places, which is a tad offputting, but nicely done story otherwise.
Poor bastard - they ruined his coat and now give him gay blackmail plus perhaps more. Sporting - not really - kinda like shooting fish in the ass.<P>
She likes pain & he likes to give his whore to others in the name of - gee I'm no more sure of that then why the story was written. Not that it isn't well written but cutely why the strange downer obscure subject?
Both the first part, and the twist in the end... There were a few changes of tense that confused me a bit for a moment, but else really well written, very good story...
non-consent. I love the twist at the end. Sometimes turnabout is fair play.
I really likes this story not because of the forced sex but because of the twist ending.
Could have used another rewrite to smooth out a few rough spots, but the pacing's good, the sex hot, and the ending twist a lot of fun.
They are developed by sick minds and enjoyed by the same