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All Comments on 'Two Lonely Souls Ch. 01'
by CGDE
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CGDEabout 12 years agoAuthorDidn't Expect This To Be This Well Received
I truthfully thought that I wouldn't of gotten such good reactions at first. It's my first erotic story so I am looking for criticism.
Anonymousabout 12 years agoWell...
The only problem I have with the story is the fact you wrote 11pm and said dinner at six lol.
Not much of a problem but a mistake :)
I like the story a lot and hope to read the next chapter of it soon!
Anonymousabout 12 years agoThird person
The SHE done this or SHE liked this, spoken in the narrative and third is a tad distracting to read. Other wise enjoyed the start of this story and please continue
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