All Comments on 'Unforgettable Night'

The only problem I had was the way you jumped between present tense and past tense repeatedly.

Sometimes it is necessary to change tense. For example, if the time frame of the action changes from past to present, the tense should change to indicate this. Sometimes a shift in tense is necessary to show this change in the time frame of the action. For the most part my stories are told in present tense, only switching verbs to past tense when needed. Some people are under the impression that it's a huge no-no, but changing tense is perfectly acceptable in English writing when appropriate.

Fucking loved it. Keep going!

definitely unforgettable when do you think you get to the next one?

Really Hot Story !

Please writ another part in this!! Its so hard for me to find writers I like, and this is perfect!

Please write a second story. This one is perfect and we want to know what will happen next and how the two sisters will seduce their brother.

Zack's blurry memory......

I loved the story and can't wait to read the next part. Worth all the stars....

Thanks for sharing!

RecHiker

From the moment the little sister was hiding in the bushes I knew she was the bigger pervert of the two. It sure was a fun read and I do hope you continue it soon!

Bring It!!!!! ;-)

Loved it. :)

Please do turn this story into a sequel. I would love to see all three of them eventually get down to business together while he is sober and awake. This story was really HOT.

Get both sisters pregnant, please. Great story

A definite 5 star story for the inventive, not your typical story. Its well written as well as so damn hot! Can't wait to read more!

Does a "5" qualify as positive feedback?

I though the plot was pretty hot, but you really don't write from a woman's POV very well. I can't imagine any woman, even a totally sexually liberated one, saying any of your dialog. It really made it hard to suspend my disbelief. I was kept imagining Zach's

"sisters" having Adam's apples, 5 o'clock shadows, and hairy backs; which really makes it difficult to maintain an erection.

A great read! Sexy and fun. A little bit of a believability issue with big bro drunk and unaware…and, had he been awake, most likely he would have struggled with "whiskey dick!" But, all in all, a very good story. Five stars!

there's no way in hell,he didn't wake up.Don't care how many drinks or how drunk he was he has 2 woman sucking and fucking him and just sleeps thru #Please!!! the man would have to be dead not wake

Love this read. I talk this and I'm a woman hahah. PLEASE write a sequel.

Absolutely do a sequel. One where they're all awake this time. And then have that little freak Lisa seduce Mom into the fun.

The story was great, for the next chapter maybe Zack finds the video and they all fuck while sober meanwhile Lisa can find out that she is pregnant.

Yes, write the sequel.

A seque is a must!

More please!

i would certainly read a sequel to this story line

Hell, yes, positive feedback! PLEASE do the follow-up! Maybe brother gets her phone...?

A Sequel is really needed!!!!!

Delightful story of sister and brother fun. Good sister fun with brother. Looking to read the next chapter.

Really hope there is a sequel can't wait read it

....just getting to sis talking to brother the morning after she videos the BJ. ....I have a sneaking suspicion that good ole brother isn't sloshing pass out drunk at all, just playing his sister to get some free sister lovin' ;). .,.guess we'll see!

...and the funny words abound!

Vajayjay, Lol!

Tinkletorium, rofl, that was a hoot!!

go on a fuck-spree

Holy fuck balls!" Rofl, you're killing me here, hehehe!!

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There's no way he's faking being passed out. Sis and I haven't exactly been quiet, and two girls bouncing around on his bed would have surely stirred some reaction in my big brother's cock by now if he were actually awake.

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....oh, I think I could manage to keep it down while I wait for the main event! ;)

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I sit up and twist my way over Zack and off the side of the mattress as Erin takes the spot between our brother's legs.

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...well thats confusing, I thought she was already there blowing him!

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"Brother's dick feels so damn good," I manage to moan out around the waves of delirious euphoria passing through me.

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That is SO fucking HOT!! I can picture myself laying there, under my little sister, her tiny, soaking wet, burning hot little puss squeezing my long, thick, hard throbbing cock like a boa constrictor. Squeezing with different muscles every inch or so... And she says that with so much emotion and awe that I have to fight not to blow in her right there! (Oh man, to have a couple of hot horny sisters!!;)

...a few twisted up words and such, but....

Wow, that was a freaking awesome story!! ....and big brother really was out through the whole thing, lol! You HAVE to write more chapters, pweeeeeease!! ;)

That was awesome. I'm looking forward to reading more.

Please write Chapter 2

That was a great story - deserves more ;)

Well written, excellent grammar, great storyline - thank you and please write a sequel! So many I try to read turn me off with bad writing style and poor grammar , this story really works ;)!

This was a awesome story. Loved reading it and hope to read another chapter. Liked everything about it.. Great job, keep up the good work.

Most awesome ever i would love a sequel. I don't read these for pleasure I read them for a great story good job

Nice story. Please make the sequel asap!

Very well written, such a sexy story. Looking forward to the next one,

Cheers is right! Any more in there like that? Get 'em out quick!

I can't stop imagining I'm Lisa. I need part two. I'm going to go nuts with out it.

Very hot story

This story was fantastic. I truly enjoyed it, and I intend to add it to my favorites list. I look forward to reading it again, as well as your other stories. THANX!

A great five star story and I am looking forward to the next installment.

Quite a stretch, but lots of fun!

I was searching for something kinky to get off to. I found it with this. When he came inside her and the sister ate her pussy I came so hard. More please ;)

Well done.

Brilliant. Please keep going. I messed around a little with my older sister once when we were both very, very, very drunk. But this story makes me imagine what might have been if one of us passed out and the other had continued.

MORE PLEASE

Are you planning on continuing this story??

I check your page every time i log on hoping for a chapter 2.

OK. Feel free to write, and most importantly, post chapter two. I enjoyed it.

Please do write a sequel. This is one of the best written stories I've read till date and would love to see how it progresses to involve the brother. Do both of us a favor and complete the story.

I could only hope to wake up!

This was hot as FUCK!

Your story was so much fun. I'd love to read a sequel. Very very hot!

You stop there and never got around to. Writing chapter two? This. Is really enjoyable reading, and parts are even humorous. BUT….I am betting you are the same way, you just HATE TO BE LEFT HANGING!

This need a sequel.

hot as fuck needs to conyinue

"BASEBALL BASEBALL!!!" I see someone is a Lily Thai fan, huh?