All Comments on 'Vampires Don't Sparkle Ch. 07'

I wish the chapters were a bit longer. Overall really like the story so far.

still too short.. one page still doesn't make a chapter.

Dialogue is better this time around. Banter goes on a little too long, but is significantly better than previous chapters. Watch out for run on sentences.

Also, avoid set ups without payoffs. You set up a flirtatious sexy competition, then abruptly ended it and just had the characters fuck. Nobody won or lost. Don't set up scenarios that you don't intend to resolve.

I login everyday to see if the next chapter has been added. I too wish they were a little longer, however I still immensely enjoy your stories. -AV

What is "MA waiting period"?

Love the story. Love the humor

". . . Wait wait wait, Vampires vacuum? That doesn't sound right, and laundry, What the hell?"

"You think blood stains just clean themselves. . . ." Bet that's never been in ANY vampire movies yet! Wonderful.