All Comments on 'Vampires Don't Sparkle Ch. 10'

I like your story but the chapters are to short to really enjoy. You do not have to do novel length but maybe try doubling them.

Can he meet another woman? A demon maybe

Here is my summary of what this story is like so far and will end like. First guy falls in love with female vampire. Second he marries female vampire. Third his wife's old flame comes back into the picture and all hell breaks loose. They try to get help from the original vampire Count Dracula. Then Ben and David go at it in another fight and Ben gets killed. Then Emily is turned into David little bitch for the rest of time. The End of the story.