by ImACuck
Oh man you're damn good story teller, every characters make me cum pretty good, i like especially Bri, she's done everything above the bars. Damn hot dom she is and kristi slutty sub. I wanna read it more buddy
But I have one request. Please, don't make Joe a submissive wimp, like so many husbands in other stories of this kind, in upcoming chapters. Let him join the action and having gim a piece of Bri. And, of course, fucking his wife silly, when he finally returns.
To the usual load of bullshit most authors use. You want us to believe that this woman is so fucked up that she says she's in love with another man because of his cock and that he owns her now? Really?
Do you honestly believe this is how women react to getting plowed? That being stretched out would give her automatic orgasms? If that's the case, every woman would want to be fisted and that's just not reality.
Do yourself a favour, ask a woman to review your story before treating me like sexually charged retards.
Great chapter 2, what comes next? I can’t wait. Xoxoxoxoxo Annette
1. technically speaking, wondrously word smithed
2. plot wise, amazingly woven. the scenes play out like poetry in motion
3. also feel I must commend your skillful 'finesse'
a. the use of "golden" trigger phrases such as
"Now it's time for me to own your wife's pussy."
"Derrick baby, tell her what a slut she is. Tell her who she belongs to now."
"My cunt is yours, my body is yours." (does she mean 'ALL YOURS'?)
the cuckolded "I Love You"'s and kissing.
b. excellent range. by that I mean that there is a time to "smash the hammer down", but there is also a time to appreciate the 'feather in the wind'. Looking her lover in the eye. saying his name. the look of satisfied contentment on her face as HE holds her in HIS arms.
c. the loose cannon factor of Bri. what are her true goals? agent provocateur yes...she engineered the situation.....is it just fun, or does she 'get off' on what's happening to dear wifey? are her plans sinister? the complete conquest and ownership of Kristi? Does she enjoy the creation of a "cheating wife" It would even be amusing if her plan worked too well and backfired ; suspicion that derrick preferred his new acquisition to her! How would this manifest? perhaps she would script humiliating / painful acts upon Kristi....which only strengthened her devotion to Derrick! oh the spiral would be some ride though!
d. delicious foreshadowing........ like intricate appetizers.....does Derrick now own Kristi? Does Kristi's body belong to Derrick (exclusively)? Forever and ever?
Usual, over the top crap. Eleven inch clock, stretching, owning pussy wife loves him now. Husband loves it. Such bullshit
Comments following are more about the writing. Just don't 'see' this guy as the humiliation type, especially after Pt 1. Think it should have been a mutual scene with him and the girlfriend on video at the end of Pt 1 and then Pt 2 could have been the 'discovery' that his wife is with the other guy! As to the fixation on giant dick.....I don't know, wouldn't it have been hotter to just discover she wanted the other guy? See my New Hot Wife as contrast.
There were several times the protagonist knew he should have said, “Stop!”. Cannot for just one time he do the correct thing? Bri and Derrick are obviously predators, not friends. They took advantage of a situation to dispense with having to convince Joe to also go along. He should have stopped it and told them to go. That would not necessarily be the end of the story, because he will eventually get home and they could meet then, after this situation had stirred things up, and still have interludes of sex along with soul searching. Also, let’s say he cut them off at the point where Derrick inserted himself, or later when he started to make her beg. Joe cuts them off. The call ends. But did they carry on after he told them to leave, or not?
Betrayal is right.
Some friends they are..........he should have screamed STOP.
Next step the lawyers
15 years ago i had a chance to live this, but sadly video chat was not available then. this would have been so erotic then, just as hot as it is now, in your story. that's a five star from this member.
This story is so so good! Another chapter please!!!
I love it when a girl convinces, seduces or otherwise convinces her friend(s), sister(s), mother to cheat. It is waaay under utilized. You did an excellent job. I can't wait for more.
This author writes like a twelve year olds wet dream. The adolescent language is insulting to any but the simplest readers. This includes all the cucktards.
OK, his cock size is ridiculous and unrealistic. And I wish I knew a woman that would fall in love due to the size of a guy's cock or how good he fucks her. Much less commit herself to anything he wants. But, all that aside, a good story so far, written well. Can't wait to read the next part but damn its getting late!. Tomorrow, though, here I come...
Love the story but it's unrealistic because cock length doesn't mean a damn thing, the diameter is what matters - being a pencil dicked cuck I know! It's the woman that runs the show no matter what the guys is packing.
This story reads like the author is jacking while writing but that's OK - because a lot of us readers are jacking right along with him. (or her)