by LanceGoodthrust
This story was very intense. I laughed, I cried, I came in my pants! I would like to see more from this author.
waking up, realizing with his GPA he'd never get into a decent university and the local community college is his only option, with his mother telling him --- albeit gently --- that his room is filthy and needs to be cleaned or that she's gonna burn everything? <p>
i kept looking for that punch line and it never came... it would have been so much more original... <p>
if you gonna write tongue in cheek stories and do it with wit, do it with wit! as it is written, Mr. LanceGoodthrust and Vlad the Impaler imploded soundlessly, though I'm sure neither think so, alas!
I feel as though you tried a little too hard to appeal to every fetish you could in such a small space. This might have been better if it was a lot longer and more developed.
his mom is 32? that's a bit young, even for the sake of fiction!
This felt like a bit of a twisted comedy piece written by a sexually frustrated (and deviant) teen. All the same, I laughed.
Good job.
Ignore the asshole commenters, no one forced the cry babies to read this. There is also no reason for them to be nasty fucks, they just choose to because they obviously have nothing better to do then complain and be asshole's, how sad. Prehaps they should try writing but of course considereing they can only bitch while hiding behind anon then I suppose they would be to cowardly to put their own work out because they know it will suck.