by wheels061070
that was going really well until you got interrupted - damn!
I am sorry, but that was one of the weakest, most disappointing endings I've ever read. Maybe its a real story, but I can't believe two people that close would next touch again and just walk away from each other. Very disappointing and would have been rated much higher otherwise.
As the others have commented, I too am disappointed with the ending. It seems like you just got tired of writing and threw together a really weak ending. The story was well writen and going along great until the abrupt stop. If I were you, I would re-write the story with an approptiate ending and re-submitte it.
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Of course it wasn't incest, their fathers were not the same and they were therefore not blood related. If he was supposed to be eighteen years old I for one don't believe that he had never tossed off before!
Of course it wasn't incest, you idiot! All these so-called incest stories about step-relatives and distant cousins. You Americans are all so hung up on religion and righteousness that you don't know what's what any more.
Apart from that, a fine tale.
Us Bloody Americans Maybe be hung up on alot of things What god do you serve BOZO
But only if you really insist...
;)
Incest requires as much of an
emotional relatinship as a
genetic or even a legal one
And in this case...
We have a lot of cases in India, where
with neither legal nor genetic relationships,
People enter into formal brother-sister roles
And maintain them for years on end in.
There's even a festival especially for the purpose!
not incest due to the fact that unless her father was also his father there is no blood conection between them also they would have different last names unless her father adopted him which is unlikely because of his age when they got marriedso it was not incest and it was ashame they did not keep in touch because they could have got married latergood story bad ending
This was not incest. Hell, having sex with even cousins is not incest. Because if it is, then you really can't marry anyone in the world cuz all the children of Adam. And then every woman or man is your distant cousin. So, its not incest.
only a total idiot would let her go no guy would allow her to leave without keeping in touch some way so they could get together when older and on thier own keep it atleast sounding realistic please
That was a good, sweet story. It wasn't rushed. It wasn't tacky. Good work.