by Leftygreenfield
Well written. I enjoyed the pace and the lack of details. Nothing unnecessary. The reader can imagine themselves in that space without distraction.
I watched you and became part of the scene
I look forward to more from you.
Short, to the point, and sweet. Questions, not all necessary, and some of them answered means the reader does the work (that's always good). I enjoyed your story... and it had an ending without an ending to boot.
Oh, and don't listen to Bob150Bob. Some people don't like short stories and will condemn you for a quickie. Their loss, so fuck'em. They have no taste.
You can ignore the other Anonymous... the spammer. Just report it.
I personally do NOT want character development.
I love the immediate sex—- no, the fast & immediately fucking.
Don’t listen to an anonymous.
They hide behind “no name”.
Great show.
1 page horny stories that get into sex immediately are perfect.
Thanks
Bob
Ok. You're a First timer. Not horrible. I personally prefer some character development. This was rushed. VERY rushed. No need to be so quick. Draw things out a bit more. What is husbands name? How did Cindy end up at a swingers party? Little things like that. Get with an editor? Lot of potential here.
2 stars
DragonRider55