All Comments on 'Watching Wife with Questions'

Different, that's for sure. It's your first story so maybe you want constructive criticism. If so, this read more like a report than a story. The fact you say it's mostly true probably had something to do with that.It's better to use the germ of truth and build a story around it. Remember, a story should have a beginning, a middle and an ending.

Also study--not just read-- some of the better writers. GOOD LUCK! I'm giving you a three for a first effort.

PS: Drop the direct addressing of the reader. (Telling us you're chuckling etc. Try to tell the story so the reader will be doing that.)

Fun stuff!

A light short scene...amusing and an easy read...3*

Well written. Good dialogue between the two. Overall an awesome first.

Now you just have to write the one where she’s really loose because of her two huge black lovers. Then beat the guys with a bat and kick in their balls. And having videotaped them in their marital bed, launch it anonymously over the internet, and into the email boxes of friends, relatives, and work. At the same time raping her... financially. That is IF you’re going to please all of the BTB fans here (which I am one, but still can appreciate the light hearted fare)..

Bravo. Well crafted too. 5-stars.

Hmmm... maybe should have been in “Romance” section?

Your dialogue is good. The situation between the couple is not all that uncommon. I was thinking there was going to be a third person, and glad there was not. Both came into the marriage with baggage and dealt with it accordingly. That is where the fun can really begin. All in all, I enjoyed it.

Thanks

This is a very cute story of a loving couple playing around. Thank you!

ExperiencedStoryteller again.

Nice job. Handled a concern of many women so that the situation becomes a forever closed concern for them both.

Fun, light, absolutely believable.

An actual "loving wife"!

Thanks for that.

So she had two children. Both are out of the house. She is only 38 or 39 years old...... So is that one of the true parts?? Is that common in your country, region?

AMerryman