by imp_ian
What you have here is fine, but LOTS more detail would really send it to the next level. What did it feel like to be penetrated for the first time? What was the texture of his cock in your mouth? What kinds of emotions did you have before, during, and after. Did you see him again?
Not a very good story and not very well written. This sounded more like a Junior High School student describing their first time to a buddy. The build-up was short, the story was non-descriptive and the conclusion was flat. This was not exciting or fun to read.
At anonymous, um ya its gay, it is in the gay section for a reason is it not? Over all a good story, little rushed at the end though
Please correspond with me at coxsman@rediffmail.com.we can take it from there.I am indian too
Write to me at coxsman@rediffmail.com. I really liked the story.
I have a friend I met here on lit and we've done the texting and talking on the phone like in the story. Planning to meet soon. Hope it works out like the characters in this story!