All Comments on 'We Own a Legal Brothel! Ch. 03'

Give us a break, stop!

Shred the rest or better still, just flush this crap.

but this is rather ordinary fare. Having lived in England, Chantal sure doesn't sound like a "formerly" proper Englishwoman. And if he is an example of her "best friend" she needed to get out more.

You need an editor. Badly. Too many grammar and typing mistakes. Also, I can't see where this is going. Is there a light at the end of tunnel or is this going to be page after page of mindless and pointless vanilla sex?

Keep it up, but work on improvement.

Regards,

Wats up with theres guys keep it coming

I think this is a hot story and I want it to continue. I'm loving it, please post more.

By all means publish more i enjoyed it.

Love everything about it (except for your confusion of "then" and "than"). Too bad she can't do the nipple and genital piercings - they'd really complete the personna. Great story. Please disregard the small-minded comments and keep writing.

Tryst

Very good, but as a couple of others commented, there are still some grammer/typing errors. I usually post on a different forum but always use an editor. A person can look at the same typo so often it looks normal, but an editor will say" you doofus is it then or than make up your mind!"

Maybe it it's time for our couple to take some time for their relationship, it's looking too much like Whore and Vouyer, rather than Whore/Lover and Pimp/Lover. Note I use the terms whore and pimp respectfully as they define their professional roles. Also in the situation they are in refering to her lover as boy is demeaning.

As another thought after about a month have Chantal have a "whoops what have I done and become moment" and take a deep look at herself?

let this story carry on, I'm sure there is more that can "come" out about chantel.She has already had a 3 sum with 2 males, now how about her & kitty plus a punter?

enjoyed it but it is lacking something. not sure what it is, wish I could be critical and helpful.........maybe if her ex was looking for her and maybe found her!!!!!!!!!!!

No comments in 14 years because it sucks.

Your use of the word 'than' rather than 'then' is annoying and detracts considerably, also should it not be 'definitely', not 'defiantly'. Poor form for an author.