All Comments on 'Wedding Bells'

there was no suspense. The downfall was not good. You need to work on building up to your story.

It was a good try. I've noticed you're great at describing the situation, but you kind of rush the action a little. Take your time, savor the journey. If Erin wasn't aware that she was a lesbian, she hopped into bed very quickly. Perhaps if you had taken the time to describe her lusting over Brianna or feeling her own arousal, it wouldn't seem so sudden. Keep writing, I can see you have a lot of potential. :)

there was no wedding bells for her just yet, I guess it was his sister she wanted and not him

Geez & Tom was pissed off wonder why,

....that's what this story was like. It just hit the high points and left out the details.

You start off fairly well, but then abruptly end the story.

Provide more detail, and work on developing your story.

The author tell us in her bio that she's "high in society"... I hope so, because she will have a tough time earning a living as a writer.

...someone point me in the direction of the suicide machine!

This is the worst!

what a nice beginning now telluss the rest of the story OK?