All Comments on 'Weekend in the Mountains'

Sorry mate, but that was a terrible read.

Constant switching of tenses, punctuation and spelling errors.

You need to get someone to read and edit your story before publishing. The changing tenses and bad punctuation are jarring.

Sure it has writing errors, but where was the surprise? 2*

She lit cigarettes for them both.UGH what a turn off. That was enough for me!!!!

Just my lame comment to join the other idiots here.

There are two stories - the one in your head and the one that you create in the reader's head. The medium is the language. So, as others have said, you should get an editor to help you with that part. Editors are easily available on Literotica.

What is she, a moped? Is that what he's riding?

Lame. Just ridiculously lame.

I didn't get past the first four words: "I and my wife". You apparently never had any grammar lessons.

... I bet you had a lot of fun writing it. There are too many critics here, looking for stories that could have been written by Margaret Atwood or Umberto Eco, and missing the innocent enjoyment of writing smut. Keep it up -- you will improve with practice -- and perhaps a little help. Three Star for a good try.

"...like a lioness stoking her pray."

geez. try: "like a lioness stalking her prey."

...that was typical of the misspellings and unintentional malapropisms in this...uh, story? Well, with some editing, it could have been a story, anyway.

LW is extra marital fun. This belongs in erotic or romantic. That being said the spelling etc is beyond repair. You need an editor badly.

learn the English language. I doubt any competent editor would want to work with this garbage. I can't imagine how it got past the scrutineers.

This story is a piece of crap!! The spelling is horrible!!

How refreshing! No cheating and he isn't a cuck.

At least there a no cheating or cuckolding involved.