All Comments on 'Wendy's Will Ch. 01'

I seriously loved this!!! Wendy creeps me out and I love it!! Thanks for the story!! <3 ^^)

god this story was hot

Wendy is a creep but it seems it could be fun to be Her slave. i hope she also likes blokes.

LOSE IT!

I loved it!!!!

It's very good. I suggest making a series out of this, it would be awesome

you should turn this into a series. An idea would be to use a professor in the story.

You should definitely make a series out of this. Or atleast another story. Me and my girlfriend have read this story so many times over. PLEASE WRITE MORE!

Great story, truth story. I've already done this to two exact girls. And it's tons of fun every night. Thanks for putting my real life in a story. :) Maybe you could talk about the other girls Wendy tried it on. Or just another chapter. Thanks.

Thank you very much. However the story will be changed soon.

I tried to a while ago but the only thing they did was change the title and not the text. I'm currently rewriting chapter 1 again to make it a bit better.

Before I forget Kira and Lisha fans, they will be back in the new story just not in the first chapter.

I really like this story and I hope you write more of them.

Maybe make this one into a series? And your right there's no real lesbian mind control story's and I'm glade you wrote this one....Keep it up!!

For a non native English speaker you did okay, for starters. About three of the concepts were foreign. Nothing wrong with foreign concepts if they are rolling with the story and add to it. If you enjoy writing, keep going. We all get better as we keep on writing. Read your stuff out loud to hear how it sounds. I find reading my stuff out loud helps me write a better story. Of course, we all need a proof-reader. This was not written to be mean. Just one non published writer to another.

I would like to see what she would have the two sisters do and who she would have them do it with. Maybe some of Kiras cheerleader friends. if you can post on this page whether you're going to do more to the story or not I would appreciate it. Thank you

You know the number is band size, right? These women would have to be massive to have a 90inch ribcage.

Wow.

Based on the date i doubt there is more planned.

And for others; the c90 is a conversion. Cup size is pretty standard but band is not.

Well done, great imagination

Wtf? If your going to use bra sizes know your bra sizes ffs no such thing as a 90 thise wouldnt be able to walk lol

good premise but moved way too fast

Moved really fast. Sometimes a slow build up is better.

Also why are you using French breast sizes? Unless you are French. In which case it's just bizarre.

Liked the idea and basic story though.

Seeing as u haven’t done anything is it alright let someone take this over