All Comments on 'What Did I Do To Deserve This? Ch. 01'

What a great start. Please edit for grammar, but I loved the story. Please make it a little longer! Can't wait for chapter 2.

Obsessed

My panties are soaked....please continue this adventure

A good start that begs for continuation. Be careful about jumping between third person and first person, sometimes in the same paragraph

Nice start to a story, but it's certainly not a romance. Erotic Couplings seems more the go. Also, I agree with the comments about needing an editor. Far too many sloppy bits.

I think this might be in the wrong section. To crude for romance.

Nice little forced, border rape fantasy. Why can't you wanna be Hemingways figure the right catagory.

What era was this in where the parents of a herd of skanks put them on display like a bunch of breeding stock and decide what bull to mate them with.