All Comments on 'What's Wrong With Me?'

I wonder how many idiot husbands have wrecked their marriage like this?

A great flash tale, though with plenty opportunity for more chapters.

Thanks for the opportunity to have a break from writing magazine articles this Sunday morning! Now, back to work...

Thanks for the offering.

How many women go to a man they barely know and say "my husband is cheating on me, so fuck me better than him"?

It lost all appeal for me.

To commit adultery. Who has their head so far up their ass that they don't know that two wrongs don't make a right? Rick is an unthinking idiot to put himself in this situation. Hell, it's not even my wife and I want to do him grievous bodily harm! It's not a consensus. Right is right and wrong is wrong. It is inherent in the act itself. Was it done from a thoughtful, considerate desire to do good to another; or was it a self serving act. This is not rocket science; it's as straightforward as it can be; and all of the attempts by authors on this site to convince me otherwise have been an epic fail.

a good looking guy who is in shape, owns his own house and who is "cute" doesnt have a girlfriend? on a side note what man calls himself cute.

when the meat is on the table, TK U MLJ LV NV

She's topping from the bottom already, with that " hurry up honey bit". So adorable. ..for now. Tom probably has a 'wreckoning' coming. Flash story essentials are on point here, so are this author's skills. Full marks. *****

What a hypocritical story. But I guess it's ok because the storyteller (our hero great guy) gets laid.

she was upset her husband cheats, so she cheats, no way in hell I would get near her

what was this all about. would you fuck your neighbor because she says her husband says it was okay. we do not shit where we eat. the husband will be over to beat the shit out of him when he finds out what is going on. this short makes no sense.

all of whom have the morals of an alley cat. I didn't read any real conflict in the story. I didn't read any exciting parts. I compare this flash story to Rachel's and this one falls waaaaaay short.

I think magmaman should take writing lessons from her. He sure could use them. This story had no redeeming value of any kind.

Before the next knock on his door is Tom. Wanting him to explain why he's sleeping with Tom's wife? This seemed like a too brief vignette out of what should have been a much longer story. We never really hear Tom's point of view. Is he really cheating on Jill? Or is Jill just a bored housewife looking for some excitement? This was a trainwreck involving three cheaters that has yet to happen. As such I felt that this was an incomplete story.

This story, as many others are, exist in a dimension where everyone is fucked up. In some ways that is real. In the way they are fucked up and not making any effort to build a reasonable future for themselves - it is unreal and depressing.

but needs some fleshing out. ****

The neighbor...was this man for real? He barely knew the couple, and as soon as the wife shows at his door with a stange story (to call it strange is to be nice...) he believes it and fucks her? The wife: If she wanted to cheat and and already have chosen him, she would tell what lie she thought better to have him...The husband: We don't know him at all...only what she says about him...Truth or lies? So this story is incomplete, and with no real meaningor goal...1*

is purely coincidental. It's a quick and simple fantasy, nothing more.

And yet the moralisers still come out to have their say. Keep writing magmaman, you are doing them a power of good.

L

ps: I recommend twistedsickmind's story 'The One Bomber' in Humour and Satire for those looking for a suggestion as to why they read LW stories like this.

I tossed the last two stories out there for the heck of it, just some I started a long time ago and didn't finish.

Bored, sitting out here in an old mobile home, pissed off and hiding. Mad at the wife, mad at myself, mostly just...I guess mad.

Writing is something to do.

When my next story posts in a couple of days, I guess you will all see why.

MGM

Thanks for sharing.

Get reaL GUYS!!

It's a story, a work of fiction, a fantasy realized in digital print.

Nobody got hurt,

It had a little moral to it.

All in all. I enjoyed it. Well done to the writer

your tale was a fun read. little tom did not get the job done. A free no

harm tale about tom not knowing what he had.

Thank you for this one magmaman. Nice read.

This author generally does better. I'm still wondering why Tom and Jill showed up at 7:30. Perhaps Tom should have told Rick it was okay if he wanted to fuck Jill.

It is best to actually READ a story before commenting, or you will find yourself, like you do here, commenting on something not even IN the tale..

Magmaman, Not one of you better stories. Well, the story sucked.

"My husband wants some other man to teach me how to fuck." Just too stupid and contrived. But thanks for the effort.

That was a dumb effort . 2*s , lazy writer is posting .

AMerryman

This was a great story...keep um cumming. Gave you 5* 's.

This was an amusing short tale. It could use a follow up chapter to resolve the ending. At this time the readers are left hanging as to how Tom will react when he finds out that Jill has fucked Rick again. And will Jill trim that bush?

Dan, this may not be your best work but it did get the self-righteous defenders of pseudo-morality worked up into a frenzy. That alone makes it a worthwhile story.

But not enough there.

Your story telling is just not up to power but I gave you a 5 anyway as I felt sorry for you in a way.! So much more you could do with this story but I think you just missed the bus on this one as everybody on here knows you could of had a great one here but you blew it big time.!**** What a shame !

Of shit

Rick must a taco short of a combo plate... Jill's hubby must be in the same league.

Some readers needs to attend some legal proceedings reflecting some assault cases.

with words on it about two cheaters? And that's your idea of a story?

Nothing but cheating . Just not a story for me.

A single guy messing with a married woman - dangerous. Jill should divorce Tom and then see Rick.

whats up with the title and description lol has nothing to do with this story

This is a website for erotic sex stories. This was erotic, and there was sex.

This is the Loving Wives section. This wife loves her husband so much she forgave him for cheating before he even gave her a hall pass!

BUT he opened the door for her to fuck around, and these are the results. Don't dish out what you can't take!

5 stars - obviously she traded up for a much better lover.

Now all she has to do is dump the EX-hubby, have a couple of babies and live happily ever after.

Works for me.

Listen close and you shall hear

the midnight groan of this man here

If stupid is as stupid does

then this mess was quite the dud.

Cute -- 5* from me.

Rick could be opening himself up to a butt kicking if ol' Tom decides he doesn't like someone else playing in his sandbox. Story didn't do much for me because of the cheating, even if it was condoned the first time around.