All Comments on 'When Katie met Hannah Ch. 01'

Your story could have been five stars except for the errors. Read your story aloud BEFORE submitting it.

But very tough to read. Had to stop and try to figure out what words were missing and wrong.

Apologies, will resubmit it. It seems I uploaded the wrong file - pre-proof read.

Edited version submitted. Many apologies for the mistakes.

Looking forward to part 2.

These women are delicious.

Probably shouldn't be tagged ENF, since it is more about exhibitionism, which is pretty much the exact opposite of an ENF story - though it is a confusion people seem to have trouble giving up, if someone loves their exposure they are really not an 'ENF'.

Is there a part 2 on the way?

Part 2 is currently being written, Sadly work has been hectic and stopped me from completing it. Stay tuned to read about the girls’ naked walk home!

I know how hard it is to reread your own work and not fail each time to spot the same error. So try rereading with a specific objective, such as continuity. Katie/Kate started out bra-less but had it back when she wanted to go down to her undies.

Otherwise nicely written and entertaining.

To the person who objects to ENF stories in E/V, where else? R/NC?

I'm enjoying the story, but an occasional word appears in a sentence where it is not wanted. The big error is Katie (heading) or Katy (in the text) ?