by Mikeba48
already established she wasn't wearing panties .. how could then later be taken off?
Such is the dream of every white wife. To take panties off that you don't have on is the kind of thing that gets white wives either accused of witchcraft or involved in high stakes games of Parcheesi with Pakistani men who masturbate under the table while farting Three Blind Mice..
You lost me as soon as you said her panties were pulled down when you just said she had no panties 2 paragraphs earlier. Proof read or get an editor.
Thanks for the effort but this story was poorly written and not very good.
It started out as an interesting story but then you lost me after you said that she had no panties. Then the guys put her on the pool table and removed her skirt and the panties that she was not wearing. You need to proof read your story. I did not read any further, so I have no idea about the rest of it.
you got lost in the storyline a little. Maybe take a little more time and not rush.
Not that you haven't already received the comment multiple times, but proof read. Mistakes like the panties error take a reader out of the story. Hook up with one of the editors here before you post. They'll help make your story better.
That was awesome! The husband was punished and all, there should have been more though. Part two of this please? The wife shouldve let a black guy fck her husband as punishment and divorce him and get beaten as a perv asshole, he deserves it!
She was about to get raped, yet she willingly takes a dick in the mouth, jerks one off. Also black guys named bob and tom???
DUMB.....................................................................................................................
Too many issues in this story. Either it is rape or not and where did the panties come from. Badly written.
I hate when stories are not proof read for mistakes. Biggest one of many wasn bob knelt notices she has no panties on next paragraph removed skirt slid down her pantiess. Thst almost made stop reading fixnthese errors amd greart story
1. We are told she is wearing no panties.
2. Bob says she is wearing no panties.
3. Bob licks her cunt.
4. Bob pulls down her panties.
Hey Hey Hey what are all you guys complaining bout? a little grammar error or two? So Fucking what !!! Why don't YOU complainers show us how to do it! Why don't YOU Complainers come up with a sexy story on your own and write it out so we can all get wood. Oh but be sure Not to have any grammatical errors or everyone will make you sorry! I myself like this story, The Hubby knew the wife wanted to try some dark meat and he set it up. But Everyone wants to "Nit pic" like they could do better. LMFAO
OMG
Don't listen to the whiny complainers. Fun story. Clean up a few details, sure, but keep writing!
Mistakes aside, This story started off pretty good. Once the wife understood that this was a set up, probably by her husband and she started to enjoy it, then the path should have been clear that they speak of fantasies and this one is shared. However, even after he gave his wife the “fucking of her life,” she treated him like shit. And her bargaining with him to allow her to have sex with others if she let him cum, then not following up with her end of the bargain was pretty lame. Find a dynamic with a couple and stick with it.
On a separate issue, please learn the safe method of using anal beads. If you were to yank them out like a rip cord, you would do serious damage to that person’ ass.
First you wrote that she was a slut that had no panties on and in the next paragraph you wrote they lifted her onto the pool table and took her panties off
Anyway I agree with one of the other commenters. She said if he let her screw these guys she would let him cum then she completely wrecked his orgasm. Sorry bitch. Deal is off.