All Comments on 'Whose Fault Was It Ch. 05'

What happened to chapter 4????????

I ONLY GAVE A 2. WHO PUTS CHAPTER 5 AHEAD/IN FRONT OF CHAPTER 3 AND DONT LIST A CHAPTER 4. THE STORY SHOWS PROMISE AND I WILL READ IT LATER ON AND REVISE MY OPINION. TK U MLJ LV NV PS MAYBE THE BLAME ISNT YOURS ABW

Lit editors do not always approve stories by chapter order - author most likely submitted them in order but Lit did not post them that way.

they are listed in number order by alphabet starting with height.

no worries a scheduling issue with Lit. Chap 4 will be here soon

Where's chapter 4? Who is Sarah? Kids??? Grandkids?? You were going strong after chapter 2, chapter 3 was ok, but then you lost it. Need to keep things clear. Figure missing chapter 4 may resolve some issues but how in 9 1/2 years you all of sudden introduce kids/grandkids when not mentioned on chapter 1???

You people need to experience the process of submittal before lambasting an author for a missing chapter.

Who the hell is Sarah?

Puh-lease!!! If that was the case, why did they waste 15yrs?

...this is our fault.

Terrible story is terrible.

...is the sister between Mark and Jeremy. She has MS and is hospitalized. It was in the first chapter.

Michae.

I have to admit that chapter five without four was a bit of a suprise! But I really doubt that it was the authors fault.

In fact, I expected that most of the complaints would be about the unbelievable coincidences! Which, of course, are at the heart of many good stories.

Just where are we headed...Reconciliation? Slipping.

what happened to chapter 4 ?????????

the fact that they stayed away from each other for so long and still love each other reminds me of the very first story I wrote here although yours is much better. can't wait for the next chapter. great job

with us. born in 1650 , reconnected in 2011, what are we talking here ? highlander ? there can only be one ?

Like others I was initially surprised that there was no Chapter 4 but hey shit happens, especially here on this site! It's not the first error of this type and may not be the last. I have read each and every chapter and I'm thoroughly enjoying your tale. I'm not sure what your plan is or where it is going exactly but it appears that a reconnect between husband and wife may be possible. It definitely leans in that direction. As the old saying goes, "Time heals all wounds!", and possibly each of theirs as well. I look forward to your next installment and wherever you take us. Hopefully the next chapter will arrive very soon.

One issue I have goes back to the very beginning in the opening of the first chapter. How did Janet get her husband stripped and tied to the chair so he was forced to watch her revenge fuck? That has not been disclosed nor even suggested as to how she accomplished this deception. Did she drug him and once incapacitated strip and truss him up forcing him to be an unwilling observer which would likely involve the need of assistance from someone much stronger than she? I doubt that he would willing sit through such a degrading experience, though she might have talked him into doing it by promising something kinky, which they both agreed to and then she changed the rules once he was tied down. In addition how did Janet learn of his indiscretion with the neighbor, Jill? Each of these issues have not been disclosed and if left unanswered really cause the logical of the plot to fall apart at its foundation. Will this information become apparent when they meet again?

.Good writing, Janet is off to her "dream job" asthe beach bar's erotic F*** masseuse at the African obese nudist swingers resort near Miami & she is popular & averages 20 half hour :sessions" per day & is live on the internet 24/7 .Janet really Loves mounting the huge horse-size hung Nigerian basketball player's massive cocks ,,what fun ,,Looking forward to Janet's hot humping "massage" stories ,,,Thanks ,,, ::::,,,,

WABW,

OK, you are giving us hope. Good luck Mark. Good luck Janet.

x

I'm pleased that you are posting these daily, even if one occasionally gets out of order.

Just have trouble believing anyone can maintain the same emotions for nine years. Pretty much a stretch of the imagination given the time span

why is no one focusing on the wife SOMEHOW tying up her husband and forcing him to watch? was he gagged ? was he drugged?

The wife could of killed him if she wanted to. Her affair and his are not anything near the same thing

Please do not have the husband take this vengeful bitch back. PLEASE!

after 6 years they still love each other? what is this shit a Harlequin romance Novel?

what is going to kill this is the fact that NO one .. NO ONE.. knows that the wife tied up her husband FORCED him to watch and placed his Life & safety were in jeopardy.

How can they possibly reconcile if that is never talked about and the wife pays NO price for her CRIMINAL actions?

He is still hung up on this broad. Why? A romance novel indeed. Maybe this reflects the fact that consequences for a persons actions are on the decline today. "Oh sweetheart it's okay, I understand why you tied me to the chair and fucked that other man...I deserved it."

A little on the romantic side but nicely done. The only thing that has me wondering is the fact that it has been 15 years since their marriage had a melt down, and I would have thought that they would have eventually gotten over the marriage and moved on.

Would it help to know that it has been 15 years since they MET?

Still I'm with you since it has been 9.5 years since the 'event'. This is the authors 1st story and I expect him to only get better -- if we don't run him off with insults and severe criticism such as HairyVagina has done.

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Not intended for you digdaddyrich but we are like spectators watching a junior high school basketball game and critiquing it like the NBA. Let's cut the new authors some slack and cut out the mean and nasty comments. Constructive criticism is great but...

"... (Sara) is the sister between Mark and Jeremy. She has MS and is hospitalized. It was in the first chapter."

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You have no idea how difficult it is for the HairyVagina wannabees to pick up facts when they're skimming through a story looking for something to criticize.

Granted the constant referrals and jumping from 15 year (from their meeting) to 91/2 years ( the time of the "event") is a bit taxing, and it is hard to keep track of some people, places and time-lines, I still think that this is pretty good for a first time effort. Yeah, it is a little romance oriented but that's OK when compared to some we get posted here.

I would put forth a bit more effort on the suspension of disbelief the next time out. I do have to agree that carrying a torch for someone for 9 1/2 years is reaching a bit. Most people do move on. Also, I think you could have played a bit more with the post trauma aspect for Mark. Yeah, he got early treatment but as you pointed out, the disorder would take a while to present itself and you cold have had some fun with that.

But all in all, a good first effort. I look forward to seeing more from you!

Regards,

C

some asinine wimp pine away & waste 9.5 years for another chance at this slut who has already pissed away two marriages by blind-siding the clueless husband(s) with her infidelity. Shoe - you are indeed a walking/babbling Darwin Award if there was ever one to be chastised. Please do everyone a favor and get back on your medications because you are annoying as hell to other 95% of the human race that actually uses their gray matter. In other words, you simpleton, quit wasting your time here and go back to watching your ugly wife pimp herself to pay for your miserable drugs.

....with such nonsense as him not recognizing Jill.WTF? Decent plot, poor dissemination getting worse.May read more if satellite goes out and the wife wants to talk.

I do understand the emotions of Mark and Janet. My wife left me in Aug. 2007 and we were divorced in Nov. I did not want this, but I tried to move on it was hard. I had met a woman but it was to early to get involed. My wife caught use in bed together one morning after she moved to the other side of the stste. It was very ugly. Our divorce was two weeks later. I was just trying to move on.

I received a call from my now ex wife one day in Jan.2007 she wanted to come back home. I thought she was crazy. The seperation and divorced was messy. I did not understand what was going on in her mind. I agreed to meet and talk. She told me that the reason she can to the house that day was to tell me that she did not want a divorce and wanted to come back. A month later she moved back in with me. We were remarried in April 2007 on the same date we were first married. I am very happy now and we are able to support eash other better than before. We are going on 11 year total together and each anniversary I always add with an asterisk. I never stopped loving her. I know that my time frame is not the same as the story but it does give me many sad and happy loving memories thank you for that.

to make this story enjoyable. The characters are unlikable and the old male running away from confrontation is to cliche in LW stories to accept anymore.

interesting story such as this misspell so many words and botch up the grammar so badly? Thru for through; Dr. for doctor; and so many others. Blaaah!

so where is the continuation of the story????????

It's just too long a time. I could believe maybe 5 but after that long a time one of them would have moved on. It' s just too hard to believe that neither one of them would have called in 15 years but still carried a torch for each other. Too hard to believe.

It was 15 years from the first time they met, not the divorce. As for the probability of it happening, I'd say about 1 when a cheesy writer is involved.

even the cities are smaller, TK U MLJ LV NV

Let's see who has learned what - finally lol

The Devil is in the details.

don't turn off the engine, just engage gears and drive TK U MLJ LV NV

Instead of getting better, the writing is getting worse. And their meeting was just awful.

Do you know what spell check is?

And all they want to talk about is a fucking parking spot? I find it more than likely that one of them would have simply gotten in their car and driven off without saying a word. 9 plus years later and they argue about a parking spot. After 5 plus chapters and THIS is our reward? I'm at a loss for words. Epically stupid are two that come to mind.

This is just awful. I give up.

You had a premise. You just didn't know what to do with it.

You are to dense to finish your own story!!!

Putrid...

No therapy? Counseling? She is fucking unhinged!

This is happy crap! Not thought out well.

The use of the English language is really poor for a wantabe writer.

Well if your not dead would please finish this story

Would love to know what happens next! Please finish.

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I would love to read the ending of this story

This is an example of RAAC at ANY cost. So unbelievable I had to laugh. All those years and you want us to believe they are just going to kiss and make up? That neither remember the past? And the hurt? This was just god awful.

Barf!